Reviews for the magician
Guest chapter 3 . 9/21/2021
You need to learn how to layout a story, this is impossible to read.
alisha.hawk chapter 5 . 8/11/2016
Please finish
tylluanpowell chapter 5 . 1/21/2016
Omg you just blew my mind
Nerdy-Country-Girl89 chapter 5 . 8/5/2015
Please continue this story I am really liking it.
Guest chapter 1 . 2/22/2015
salazarDream chapter 2 . 1/21/2015
in this story does Thea kill Sara or you plan on not having that part happen?
airangel85 chapter 1 . 1/13/2015
Oh please continue this. A badass Felicity training with Malcolm. Oh yes please!
Naitch03 chapter 1 . 11/19/2014
Okay then.

This story has great promise, and I think it could make an excellent multi-chapter story. But a few things to consider:

Everything runs together. I've found, to make it easier to read, that it's best to separate dialogue; IE
"This is easier to read" Felicity said.

"I agree." Malcolm said.

Like that (sorry, it easier to show you than try to explain it.:)

Other than that, I'd like to see this continued.
Guest chapter 1 . 11/19/2014
yeah update is so good! just one thing, does thea know about oliver being the arrow?
aleiki chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
I like where you are going with this story. As for the comment that another reviewer left, I have not read a story the is exactly the same as yours. There is a story where Malcolm is Felicity's dad too, but not the same plot as you. Maybe you can seperate sentences a little more so they are not long paragraphs, otherwise great intro. Cant wait for an update.
chloelovestvdspnhod chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
love it xoxo
Jean Deere chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
I really like it. I would like to read more if you wanted to write more!
annependragon chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
Ohhhh this is got some much potential.
Redlioness62 chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
You do know that someone on here has almost the same exact story? Just to let you know.