Reviews for The First Sparks
RDLV chapter 1 . 7/7
Can you craftily what the different between this story and "The Game of Heavens" is? (It has an identical description and an almost identical word count)
Guest chapter 39 . 7/5
so busy trying top be mysterious while "tempting" with constant dropped hints and flash sense that your not even writing an actual story anymore! Its one thing to leave out ANYTHING that someone would have to read ALL the books to know...never mind that VERY few of your readers have read them all...and WHY you keep expecting your readers to KNOW it ALL when you are still in the FIRST BOOK! Quit referencing it! quite playing on "everyone already knows this so u dont have to write it!"...never mind NONE of your people are ANYTHING like the people in the books...Sure you MAKE them do the same things the idiots in the books did...even though they are NOT THE SAME PEOPLE! Out of character people then acting in character is out of character! combine that with the constant mystical mumbo jumbo thats worthless to read and fills half of every fucking chapter now is fucking boring! This is your 2? 3rd attempt at this...and its worse then the first! Stop obsessing over advanced writing techniques and master the basics! Like character growth and interaction..keeping those characters in that new character. Basic story development. filling plot holes., Basic story details... would be nice if YOU wrote the book and details and didnt relay on a bad copy and past and then butchering of the original
Guest chapter 49 . 7/4
I always thought that there should be something better for Ros then Joffery.!
Guest chapter 47 . 7/4
I love Willas Tyrell.!
Guest chapter 46 . 7/4
Oh No! Not a Squire to the King ! Bad idea.!
Guest chapter 45 . 7/4
; ))
Guest chapter 44 . 7/4
Guest chapter 43 . 7/4
Interesting, what will carch Thoros' attention ?
Guest chapter 41 . 7/4
: ))
Guest chapter 40 . 7/4
Whoa there ! The North follows the Old Gids, the Iron Islands follow the Drowned God, all the other kingdoms follow the Seven Who are One. What other god or gods are followed by one of the kingdoms ? And which one ? The North, The Vale, The Riverlands, The Crownlands, the Stormlands, Dorne, the Reach, the Westerland, and the Iron Islands. That is Eight Kingdoms and the Lands and Islands Sworn to King's Landing and the Crown. Nine in total with three religions. Right ?
Guest chapter 39 . 7/4
Typical Sansa. A stupid air-headed liar and moral coward. Please tell us that at least this time she will keep her mouth shut, obey her father and leave King's Landing as ordered And Not get her own father and household murdered ?
Guest chapter 38 . 7/4
He may be gifted a Keep from his father or Robb. The Only way he could inherit a Keep would be the same way his own father had, if his older brother Robb died !
Marvelmyra chapter 33 . 7/4
What ? Not a single observstion from Arya about Joffery.?
Guest chapter 32 . 7/4
The King is coming north... Not the King is north coming. Just fyi.
Marvelmyra chapter 31 . 7/4
Very interesting perspective. Just what does the 'Great Other' really want ?
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