Wow only second chapter and I’m already convinced this writer is terminally stupid. But it’s not surprising, 95% of the writers for PJO are all semi literate retards.

Ya know, no matter how many times I read this story, I always forget Angel is 19, I think it's because she can't fight and is peaceful or whatever, she just always seems younger to me. Also fantastic story, I really love it

i read this thing again after re-watching naruto, and i was like:
assassination technique...? OH WAIT A SEC
thanks for making me laugh

Amazing .. just pure amazingness in this story. Had me hooked till the end. I just wished for some brother sister bonding between Percy and Lauren. Maybe a one shot? But seriously, this is one of the best I have read. Thanks

I think you could use a proofreader. My goal is not to offend, you have a great story, but quite often you will use a wrong word or not use the correct form of a word. This is just one example, but during Elveril's time with Hestia you say "small talks," when it should be "small talk." This is just one minor example, but I can't help but notice them all over.

Thank you for the spoiler that Percy and Arty get back together, I was about to scroll through the entire book and stop if you broke them up for good. You saved me the trouble.

You had an idea, but your grammar kind of ruined it.

I hate gay couples

this sucks and I will tell Percy about this

Sparta is NOT A ADJECTIVE SO YOU SHUT UP! so it is a great story you gust need to add more detail and you need to make each chapter longer

Inspection complete
You are doing very well

Awww, I wanted some Tratie!

I know that Elveril despises kids of Athena, but killing Jenkins's family is crossing the line, don't you think?

Age doesn’t have much to do with the power of the god Zeus is the king of the hill and matched only by hades and Poseidon.

Whys Elveril being a prick lately tho, he gotta chill a bit

For someone who is fairly new to the demigod scene despite age, Elveril seems kinda overpowered