Reviews for Maleficent Kitsune |
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![]() ![]() ![]() sweet story. |
![]() ![]() Conti plz. One more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gods! This was so good. We basically need to remove akatsuki, deal with the hyuuga and arrogant uchiha and we are done (ha! Neji keeps his seal! I wonder what the elite uchiha will do to the failure thay is sasuke)! Sadly we needed like 1 more chapter to deal with the clean up and epilogue (why? Why harem? I sorta get clan restoration, but I still am against it. I'm not against a polygamist relationship, but so long as it's small like 4 max because a large group is hard to maintain such loving and dedicated relationships. Fuck, look at that disgusting boruto series, naruto is busy and hardly has time for ONE wife, how would he have time for multiple wives and his duties?) and depending on the epic confrontation between akatsuki and the allies (deidara would get crushed by itachi in a second like in canon as he lacks his artifical eye) ww would need at least one chapter for them, depending on how you deal with them. While I love how maleficent interacts with everyone, just but very harsh, vengeful but not spiteful, cruel but compromising, i wish we saw more of her. Like what she does for fun, favorite foods, a bit more on how her mind works when not dealing with enemies or anything remotely like scheming. Plus, I wish we saw them more when naruto was young for the fluff. I imagine young kids craving physical affection constantly like with hugs or tickles, but sadly I cannot see maleficent doing that. She isn't a bad mother, but she lacks the warmth I associate with mothers. I get that noble families are different, but I wish we saw this intimacy of a mother child bond at its infancy because while maleficent cares for her children the relationship also seems a bit standoffish. Also, stupid tsunade. You should have slowly tortured danzo like by twisting his limbs as the bones slowly snap and the muscles break off and then eviscerate him while slowly pulling his intestines off so he lives and sees in dawning horror his body being ripped out but by bit. And torture the civilian council. I'd say break all their arms and legs or something as they all can't handle pain well (and good job describing their thought process, ninjas have power as jutsus so they crave another form of power. It makes them better antagonists as they have a reason jealousy, for harming shinobi. Still think damyos are a stupid existence. Who the fuck cares about money when someone could easily shinra tensei the shit out of a lord's castle and take their riches. I think civilains here are so pathetic. They don't have any real power to support their authority in this violent world. Of course I respect craftsmen or anyone who has skills, but most civilains lack such skills). But thank you for dealing with danzo. I hate that prick. He totally does not have konoha's interest at heart. that was odvious when he took shisui's eye when shisui could have ended conflict (stupid itachi, shisui told you danzo did that and you should have stopped him. He obviously is not to be trusted. At least get sarutobi to deal with him if you had to kill off the uchiha). I know fanfics are places where we can change characters to fit our stories, but it is really stupid to think that man ever cares for anyone else (at least canon danzo. Fanfiction danzo's can be different entities, but like bakugou from boku no hero, the character is a complete and utter asshole who should not be liked (how is he #1 in japan?! I want him to have a violent death) so i find it insulting when people remotely sympathize with such cruel characters. They are more like obstacles and hindrances than actual people. I hate Danzo so much. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my. I for one would have loved to see some bonding before maleficent adopted naruto, but this is also good as she removes him at the earliest opportunity. Itachi will live! So, i wonder what will happen to the uchiha clan? The massacre will happen by other shinobi or what? Will sasuke die seeing how it was itachi who allowed him to live? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn this was a good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this fic also loved the reference to the game of thrones. That was pure genius. Can't wait to see what's next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy crap. That is one brutal omake |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I have a new top 10 favorite fiction~! You have done an excellent job with this story and I hope to see an update sometime this year but I will be patient because this story is worth the wait. |
![]() ![]() ![]() okay i love this. congrats you completely drawn me in to your tale. thank you |
![]() ![]() - Immoral doctors. Well, there was Shinnō with ties to the Sky Village from the film: "Naruto Shippūden the Movie: Bonds" And then there was that other Konoha missing-nin by the name of Hiruko from the "Naruto Shippūden the Movie: The Will of Fire" film and his Chimaera research. Not that it matters any longer. |
![]() ![]() Writing is made of several pieces, and I love your writing save the last: your premise/prompt is always intriguing. Your plots are fair or better, your pacing is good and leaves me feeling neither rushed or as if things are dragging, but your skill at putting a scene to page needs improvement. Not just in this story, but all those of yours I have read. Your text is incredibly dialogue heavy, and what little action or scenery that is shown is more stage direction than descriptions. The dialogue seems to be overstuffed and repetitive (in repeating knowledge learned even a single scene previous), which makes up for the word count but takes away from depth. Humans, and other characters, are more than dialogue. Vision is drawn to even small movements, and anything in the environment that is visually different: striking against the rest, or clashing in color or form, or out of place. Sounds and smells are also important. Try writing practice by creating a full scene where there is no dialogue, or even sound. You have potential, you just need to strive for more |
![]() ![]() ![]() it has simply been 2 long sence u updated this story man lol i have read it top to bot 2wice now... sadly tho i have read aLOT of your stories. to the point ur one of the like...20 some odd authors that r on my fav list i have been reading on this site for 20 freeking years man... thats a huge complement considering how picky i am tho u probly dont care about a reader as small as myself i understand. i just wish u updated more i know we both have gotten older i admit but ur a great wrighter and if u had real books i would read them... anywho please update your older fics please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Little Fu-chan, the seven tailed Jinchūriki, would make a nice sister for Naruto. |