|Reviews for On the Flip Side|
| Guest chapter 28 . 10/1
Never give up trying,and half the job’s done.
| Guest chapter 21 . 10/1
Warmth is the toppest prority,nova,glad to see you know that.
| Guest chapter 19 . 10/1
| Guest chapter 18 . 10/1
Oh my gods! I had difficulty of thinking of something bad enough to punish the have found the perfect punishment,though I think the curse should carried to the rest of their lives.
| Guest chapter 14 . 10/1
I like drarry and hinny.(Draco and Harry,Harry and Ginny.)
Or else I can’t think of any other pairs-oh wait,Luna and Harry is okay.
| Guest chapter 13 . 9/30
Very much looking forward to it,eh?well,in your position I would be positively quivering in breathless anticipation.
| Guest chapter 12 . 9/30
“Or else.”hahaha,so much for the bad guy act,sevvie!
| Guest chapter 11 . 9/30
You know,when I read the lyrics to I really hate your face I imagined the voice to be I listened to it the singers voice was male.I
| Guest chapter 9 . 9/30
Again,this problem needs to be addressed and thank you for doing it!
| Guest chapter 8 . 9/30
I am so glad someone wrote this needed to be out you,*scrolls up quickly to check author name*
| valera chapter 11 . 9/25
I don't think that McGonagall would treat Harry differently just because he's in Slytherin. When she looks at him, she sees the Harry she has known for two years - not just the Slytherin crest (which is only a temporary arrangement at this point in your story). This behaviour was far fetched with Sinistra; it's even more so with Harry's former Head of House. She probably still sees him as Gryffindor. You can't just wipe out the past two years. People aren't that simple.
In addition, I don't think that McGonagall would just dismiss Daphne's statement. She could easily check what had happened doing a "Priori Incantatem". She's an intelligent woman, not a brainless fool.
| GuestTypewriter chapter 31 . 9/24
This is not the first time I’ve read this, but
"Don't say that about my Dad."
Gets me every time! I really loved that part! Thanks for sharing!
| GuestTypewriter chapter 21 . 9/23
I absolutely love this scene with the snake “prank!” I keep thinking about it and it always gives me a laugh, plus Nova’s such an adorable sweetie!
| valera chapter 5 . 9/24
That was fast! Snape has cultivated his Potter hate for years. Agreeing to be his guardian mere seconds after he discovered Harry's abuse is just not plausible. Starting to change his behaviour and his views, yes, but not taking over the role of a guardian. That's very much OOC.
The whole abuse thing is overdone. Most fanfiction writers tend to to that and heep a bunch of cruelties on Harry. It's not necessary. The book is bad enough as it is. In your case it's also not realistic. Considering the timeline Harry suffered from internal bleeding and a raptured spleen for at least a week. In addition he was starved (not for the first time and also continously at least for a week). He would be dead, magic or no magic.
A few other things that bugged me:
Harry does not know the name of Daphne although she is in his year and he has shared classes with her? Very unlikely.
Daphne calls Draco "Malfoy" and he calls her "Greengrass"? The Gryffindors are on first name basis. I would expect the same for the Slytherins - especially considering their code to watch out for each other. Then the Golden Trio talk about Draco and refer to him by his first name all of a sudden? That's very inconsistent.
Daphne can see through the glamour while everyone else including Dumbledore, Snape and McGonagall can't. That's not very believable.
Anyway, it is your story, and therefore you can do whatever you like with it. Thanks for sharing this! Even if not all of it is my cup of tea, I very much appreciate your work and your willingness to share.
| valera chapter 2 . 9/24
I'm not a native speaker, but I think your text is in dire need of commas. Lots of commas. ;) It is very difficult to read. Especially your dialogues drive me crazy. Things like ""I'm fine." He said." destroy the flow of reading. It should be "I'm fine," he said. Commas give a sentence structure.