Reviews for Our Own Demons
justaislinn chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Oh my GODS, that last line about Lily, Jesus Christ.. I mean, it was weirdly fitting, but after that, I actually had to sit down for a minute.
I also got kind of attatched to the Little One name, so I'm glad they fit so well together!
Also you're brilliant for the trigger warning in the beginning and the offer to give abridged versions to anyone who wants it. Personally, I found this to be pretty mild, the only thing that was emotionally intense to me was the "I don't want to die" break down.
Probably because that's the same one I had, after being depressed and suicidal for so long. I think it's the same revelation everyone who recovers has, the realization that you don't want to die, you just don't see any other options.
That was what made this feel real to me. So nice job!
In regards to harry being invalid for the prophecy, he's still the one with the horcrux in his head, so he's still kinda important! But I guess that makes Neville the prophecy child?
But that doesn't make proper sense either, because Voldemort CHOSE Harry, he killed the potters personally and marked Harry as his equal, both by giving him his scar and by choosing to see him as the threat, as a rival, as his equal.
So my final answer is that the prophecy is null and void, and probably never had to be put in motion in the first place. It's called self fulfilling prophecy for a reason. It doesn't actually hold any weight beyond the power of your belief.
I just had a really funny thought, though. To be "born" to someone doesn't have to be literal. Someone who trained you, or who raised you, someone who moulded you into the person you became.. well, you could describe that as them having birthed you.
For example, Hyrda bore the winter soldier, and while the soldier is Bucky Barnes, he was shaped by them. Kind of like how when you give a superhero their title, it's "and thus, _ was born!" The start of their superhero career!
So I just had the really funny thought, running with that logic, that Snape is the prophecy child. Severus turned to Dumbledore, who basically forced him into the Light, and turned him into a spy. How many times has Snape defied the Dark Lord? He certainly was marked by him. The only real issue left is the seventh month.. it's now known as July, but before Ceasar added months to the calendar just for fun, it didn't have July (for Julius) or August (for Augustus).. so the seventh month was September.
That still doesn't help me much, except that school started the first of September for hogwarts, doesn't it? So maybe, like how the act that cements a superhero's image and coins their name, Severus Snape returning to the school as a teacher redefined him, and he was thusly born.
Or maybe the end of September is when he knew that Voldemort was going to go after the Potters and was when he begged for Lily's life. Or when he went and asked for Dumbledore to hide them. I'm not quite sure WHEN they first went into hiding, or hiding under fidelius at Godric's Hollow.
In the end, the timing still doesn't quite add up, but I'm amused by it regardless. If you really wanted to, you could play with the timeline a bit and add/move big events to force Sev into the role, I just found the thought absurd :D
Write on:)
Guest chapter 12 . 7/10/2017
Oooooohhhhh. I love 3 and I know a lot happened in this chapter, but I really adore the Jarvis and Ward the part! I would love to see some more from his POV:) Thank you for writing and uploading!
mwinter1 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Awaiting more.
candinaru25 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
i loved this chapter. And i say Tony really let Dumbles have it. I always thought the way the old man thought was just insane. really telling a kid he needed to die to end the world. And as for the pairing for Tony i would rather have him with Steve than with Pepper. And i do wonder what these wizards will think once they see that Harry Potter lives with the Avengers. And he is the reason wards have seen set up around the tower
malb901 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
To be honest I didn't like this chapter. The first part when Dumbledore told Harry and Tony about part of Voldemort in Harry's scar for me, is full of weird ideas how to fix what happened in HP series and they aren't convincing for me enough. Put a spirit (!) into a magical box and throw it in the ocean? If that was a possibility then why even creating Horcrux if you can be locked in a box as a spirit. For me, it sounds like an easy way to fix problems of HP universe. Probably Tony and Bruce will figure out how to destroy the part of Voldemort that's in Harry's scar too. Then Tony talks with Dumbledore and somehow he knows what happened in Hogwarts and he learned that in 12 hours (when Harry was almost dying), how?
Then JARVIS talking to the ward Harry created which was probably the best part of this chapter but still there was a little too much of "Little One" so it was hard to read for me.
Next Harry and Tony interaction - Harry is very open, a little too open if you take into consideration that he knows Tony for like a week or two?
Like I wrote before there's very little magic in this magical world.
As for your questions. Harry's not weak, he found out that he has to die so it's ok for him to be a little depressed but it lacks these raw emotions and a beauty of his sacrifice and this is understandable since Tony found a perfect and very easy solution to his problems.
As for prophecy does it matter who his father is? Voldemort chose him and he survived and became the Boy who lived. I don't think that Voldemort will stop thinking that he is the Chosen One just because his biological parent was someone else.
Carenwl chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Love
Larkscope chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
I don't see how you think Harry might be being too weak; he's a teen who nearly died and was just told he'll have to die for real soon. I think many adults would have a good cry after something like that.

I also don't see how he's not the subject of the prophecy. Lily bore him for James, who knew about his paternity and embraced him as his son regardless. I could be mixing up stories, but didn't he blood adopt him or something? In other Harry is someone else's son stories, this isn't an issue, because James is his father, despite not being biologically related to him. It'll be interesting to see what you do with it.

I do like the ICW and Lily's name. The ICW seems to have diverged from canon because I think in canon Dumbledore is the head of it, the Supreme Mugwump I think. Even with all his faults, I can't see him neglecting something he's the head of that badly. But yours is an interesting take on it. I look forward to seeing more wizards arriving at the Tower. I imagine MACUSA will want to send people too since they'll be closest and will have possibly gotten the most data on it.

As for Tony pairings, I usually like Tony/Harry or Tony/Loki. Obviously that's not happening here! Although I suppose if you went the no Hogwarts route Loki could come and teach Harry. But however you go on the pairings and back to Hogwarts or not I don't have a great preference as I can see your characters going either way.

Good feels in this chapter.
hitomi1993 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
You're on fire!
I'm loving every part of it... and I do think, that after everything Harry's been through,he deserves to vent a bit.

I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter
Guest chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Love this story! Love how you brought in the ICW, Tony alone, or maybe with a witch?
vepmoon96 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
This story is really good, and keeps getting better. Your style is very nice and I don't feel as if you are just telling me what is happening. I also agree with the name but I am not that fond of the (lil') nickname. Just rubs me the wrong way. Other than that I am looking forward to the next chapter.
36143 chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Excellent! The way you've portrayed human interactions is very good. Humans are difficult.

A grammar note: if you want to have a voting system, i.e. "yes", or "no," then the words for "yes," and "no," in a formal setting are either "yay," and "nay," or "aye," and "nay." "Aye" is pronounced "I."
You used the word "I" instead of "aye." Both are pronounced the same, but only "aye" is used in voting.
Raven of the Whiplash chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
I really like this story. Its very well written and very engageing. Maybe a few more spelling checks (you wrote Ton insted of Tony at one part) but no major problems. Keep it up!
dauntlessofthesea chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Harry did not seem whiney at all, this was expected, I for one thought he was going to tell Tony thank you.
That was a fantastic chapter! Finally someone with common sense steps in! I'm so glad Tony just basically roasted Dumbledore and scolded Harry. I understand the way it went in the books because it had to be done, but I've never forgiven Dumbledore for not finding other solutions when he had had so much time. I was really confused with this story at first because I couldn't understand why the wards were rushed and so important. I didn't get why Harry thought the wards were so important that he'd kill himself for them. But now that you've introduced common sense I see that that was on purpose, and I just realized by writing this review the psychology behind Harry's thinking. So yeah, great chapter, interesting with the ICW, and I absolutely loved that conversation between Tony and Steve! :)
ALzzza chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
I just read your two most recently posted chapters, they are brilliant as always. And wow, I am not entirely sure how I feel about Jarvis. I'm liking the protectiveness and of course the whole I-will-smite-you-where-you-stand vibe he is giving off. 'Threats to their creators will not be tolerable' totally badass. Also totally A with the whole ready-to-kill-Albus-if-you-threaten-us thinking. I honestly just can not forgive Albus for how he manipulated Harry and well everyone. Also love how you added a solution to Harry having to walk to his death, very creative. Drowning continually, just bam in your face entire-Harry-Potter-plot-line. If I might add though it is totally irrelevant, Albus Dumbledore is officially top on my 'Harry Potter Hit List' I have even SOMEWHAT (note the emphasis) forgiven Snape for being a total jackass. Only after I read the Deathly Hallows again though. I have acknowledged that he was brave and cunning. Don't get me wrong, I still don't believe Harry should have named his children after them. That was just stupid. And really Ginny, what the hell! I would have buried that idea six feet under the second I heard it. Oh, by the way love how you portrayed Harry (as always). This will probably sound awful, but I kind of love Harrys 'self destructive' tendencies as Snape so eloquently put it. It keeps things rather interesting. Is that bad of me to say? But yeah I love this fanfiction and I hope you keep up your writing. I have commented before and I really don't want to just relay the same thing over and over. Sorry if I did. :)
Harry Albus Potter Dumbledore chapter 13 . 7/10/2017
Tony should be paired with Pepper. I'm tired of all the slash stories here in this fandom.
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