Reviews for She's Perfect
Challa chapter 1 . 3/7/2015
I read about one third of the story and honestly tried to continue it, but it annoyed me that you've decided to not use words like "The" and "A" when you write. English isn't my first language, but I feel like the correct way to phrase sentences like "Young man sighed," "Man smiled," "Older man said," would be to add a simple "The". THE young man sighed. THE man smiled. AN older man said, etc.
I do want to give you thumbs up for the length of the chapter/story. Your story is pretty easy to follow and I like how descriptive you are. I will re-read this once I'm not as tired as I am atm. It's 1am and I'm beat :p So, I'll probably get back to you tomorrow.
The story in itself is interesting and I 'need' to finish reading it, so yeah. :)