|Reviews for A Great Fall|
| Guest chapter 6 . 4/11
Most of us just use the show
| GoldenFireFox chapter 8 . 11/11/2017
A little sappier than your usual works but justified and very well written.
| Guest chapter 5 . 11/11/2017
I don't understand why people are so taken in by the Andal lies about the first men. I mean, sure, the people of the North are different from the people of the South but that doesn't make the savages. That's just stuff spread by the Andals because they tried and failed to conquer and convert them.
| Guest chapter 3 . 10/10/2017
A good plot direction, but the dialogue's way too formal. I wouldn't expect them to talk like that to each other.
| I-AM-JOHNLOCKED-.bbc chapter 6 . 9/30/2017
he is lyanna and rhaegar son because it is weird that ned came back from the tower of Joy with Jon
| Anime Princess chapter 8 . 9/15/2017
Nice of Catelyn to have a change of heart after the realization that she might have been dying
| MelisandreStark chapter 8 . 6/2/2017
Aww this was so adorable xxxx
| TheHuntresss chapter 6 . 5/30/2017
I honestly don't go th but i don't think of it so much as messing up. I think that Ned had something with Ashara and was likely even trying to get a contract with her when everything went down with Brandon. We know Tully pushed Ned into fullfilling Brandon's part of that contract and since he didn't have a known bethrothal he had to do it or lose honor.
as for birthdates we dont' really know if Catelyn carried for the full 9 months or if she had him early all we know is that Robb was a honeymoon baby same goes for jon and honestly with all the secrets he's keeping about Jon it's even possible that his birthday was changed to protect him.
That's my opinion anyhow
| Child of Jon Snow chapter 1 . 3/13/2017
this is intersting shall read it
| Guest chapter 8 . 1/23/2017
I just wanna see tywins reaction that would be hilarious
| public static void chapter 8 . 1/8/2017
A wishful end. It would have been interesting to know more, but the issues presented up to that point in the story were solved well.
I liked, especially, Jaime agreeing to the wall instead of fighting until he was safe with Cersei. His character development was not yet to the point it was in canon, and I felt you should have touched that a little to keep him being the arrogant and entitled person he was at this point of the story.
The idea of Robert marrying Lysa is something really interesting. Not only because I love when Lysa gets a happy ending but because I'd love to know if Petyr would keep his plan to control Lysa. This way, he would control the Queen and the probable future Crown Prince through her marriage to Robert.
I feel that, in general, you rushed the story through the last chapters. The characters were not allowed to have much development to make up for their decisions.
Either way, the main characters did have an important development that felt completely natural. Ned and Catelyn more than anyone.
I enjoyed reading this.
| public static void chapter 2 . 1/7/2017
A little note: this won't count for the review exchange. I'm just hooked and can't get enough of this storyline.
Before I forget, I'll point out some technical mistakes.
Throughout the fic, you kept forgetting commas and periods at the end of the dialogues. ["I believe you too"] should end like this ["I believe you too."].
There were some moments when you forgot commas in other parts of a sentence: ["Yes Father"] should be ["Yes, Father."].
And finally, you might want to change the 'ok' in this sentence: ["It's ok Jon, I believe you"]. 'Ok' is not a word used in the medieval ages, which is the setting of this world. An option could be 'alright'.
Now, I must congratulate you again on the magnificent characterizations. From almost-dying!Catelyn to helpful!Jon, to worried!Ned.
But, I don't think Jon would have accused the Queen in front of Robert or even in front of his younger siblings. I think he would have kept on trying to speak to Ned alone.
I loved Maester Luwin here. Vote Luwin for Grand Maester 298!
| public static void chapter 1 . 1/7/2017
This is a fantastic premise for a story as it changes many things from the original; the first that comes to mind is Bran not having the three-eyed crow dreams during his convalescence. I already want to keep reading to see what you did with that.
As with your other stories, I'm loving Catelyn. She's very difficult for me to read, but she's also a great character with balanced personality/attitude/decisions. I like how you keep her in-character throughout the story, most of all when talking to Jon.
Regarding him and Cersei, I must say they seem a bit out of character.
While you mention that Jon and Catelyn avoid speaking to each other, you also have him seeking to assist her. I get that it was to establish their coldness while showing they don't actively loathe each other, and because it was about Bran.
With Cersei, the main thing is that she wouldn't punch Catelyn, but slap her or do something more humiliating like spitting on her.
Even with those details, I think you nailed the characterizations of everyone here. They're truer to their book selves than in many other fanfics I've read.
Your narrative is also great. It keeps showing and describing the character's surroundings as well as their thoughts and all the happenings around them, but it never gets dull or boring. Instead, it helps to get a clear understanding of the situations and settings from the character's pov.
I'll say again that this is very interesting and I'm going to keep reading.
| One-Step-From-Hell chapter 8 . 12/2/2016
| TMI Fairy chapter 8 . 11/30/2016
With men being given a choice of "death or the Watch", I'd like to see women being given the choice of "death or Silent Sisters".
In my book at this stage of his life Jeofrey is very, very close to being made an offer of "death or the Watch".