|Reviews for My Twist on the Orion and Artemis Myth|
| Uzumaki D. Dragon chapter 24 . 8/1
I have no idea what are you trying to make here.
Like every fic in which percy is betrayed in the begining he is like, I 'll dethrone Zeus and I hate olympians.
and like every fic he became zeus bitch, kneeling before him and helping them againest the titnes So Its like there is no point to this story whatsoever.
| blackcharizard762 chapter 14 . 6/29
How would Percy know what a biker is they didn't exist when he was 9
| aSinglePancake chapter 24 . 6/26
I love the growth I've seen in your writing! It's wonderful to see where you started and how you've grown into your own style! Absolutely wonderful
| aSinglePancake chapter 16 . 6/26
I realize why the characters weren't reaching out to me, they don't seem to have any individuality in the text. Each person seems to speak, react and think the same way. I'd love to see some more individuality slipped into the characters, a good way I remember to do exactly that is to remember that people and characters are the sums of their experiences.
Barring that, the actual plot is intriguing. I'm curious as to how it all goes on
| aSinglePancake chapter 6 . 6/26
Man the beginning of this is rough to read, it reads very weakly and none of the characters have given me a sense of depth yet. Hoping that changes as we progress
| DanDrake chapter 24 . 6/25
Good chapter but I have a question (unless it happened in a earlier chapter and I don't remember) Thalia didn't get permission from her mother to swim in the styx. So shouldn't have that messed up the ritual. And I know her mother is dead but considering nico pretty much spent all if book 4 summoning spirits he should have been able to summon her mom long enough to ask. Just wondering
| Ronnie R15 chapter 24 . 6/25
So Percy is the person who kept Thalia from being lost in the river?
| Max20.7 chapter 24 . 6/25
I like this chapter.
| Isiliel Otris chapter 24 . 6/25
Its some small... But cool too.
| Guest chapter 4 . 2/14
Weird Orion is older than Percy
| Antisado chapter 5 . 12/9/2018
This could've been a lot better if it wasn't written so poorly...
| BookFan98 chapter 23 . 9/14/2018
| Shadowkiller16 chapter 5 . 9/3/2018
"the council was shocked by Orion's words"
Transformers thought. Why can I connect everything to Transformers?
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/26/2018
Ok what, Poseidon plotted his own sons death? I mean Orion deserves to die but still thats pretty messed up
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/26/2018
I almost broke my phone because of you. I dont think I have ever been this pissed off from reading a book before, Impressive.