|Reviews for Savage|
| Guest chapter 28 . 9/7
Please continuous is very nice
| gabedane chapter 22 . 11/27/2022
Oh, Yoruichi fucked up. She is messing with emotions of other people that I'm not even sure she herself understands. With her "iT SoUnDs LiKe A CrUsH tO Me."
| DracoKing30 chapter 28 . 11/9/2022
Really love this story can't wait for new chapters
| brasheril-holmestalentsmaster chapter 27 . 8/20/2022
I really want more of this.
This is really unique because it shows the animosity and certainly not honorable competition between WOMEN (not girls) over the same man.
It's a breath of fresh air, especially when most other stories would just have them agree to share and be fine/cordial with each other super quickly and easily, that is, without a period of fighting between them.
Same goes when you've shown that people have different sides/behaviour around different people and in different circumstances. Yoru being the prime example here.
The boatload of zanpakutos for ichi I think is unnecessary, it's like you're choosing quantity over quality and depth, like it'd be with other reapers.
Remember souls are malleble/mutable, as the zanpakutos are connected to each reaper or even the respers' themselves they themselves can change and their abilities grow and evolve too and not only in scale or power.
Other than that I love the dialogue and interactions they're great.
Same for the bsttles, their descriptions are top-notch.
I hope I helped with constructive criticism.
Over and out
| jbadillodavila chapter 1 . 5/18/2022
| PJ Storyteller chapter 1 . 3/15/2022
Honestly I don’t know why I’m even commenting when you’ve already abandoned the story years ago but I will. The story had a good start and a good plot but I agree with the many who comments that your writing started to downhill from the soul sword ark. Though in my opinion it was from ch 11. Your writing has definitely improved same with your grammar which is what is important. I just hated what you did with the romance and the character development of Ichigo though especially in CH 28 that was in my opinion a terrible chapter one of the worsts in this story. It reminds me of many teen drama unrealistic tv show shit. A plot style that many amateur writers make. I would focus on studying the habits of what a real relationship and real interaction would look like instead of some fantasy. I don’t mean to sound rude it’s just my own unbiased observation from reading your piece you definitely have talent in the top 5 percent in fact but your presentation was dreadful. I think you have something don’t know if you will read this but I hope this helped. Thank you.
| LL chapter 28 . 2/12/2022
Wow! This done story right here! Love the interactions between ichigo, soi fon, and suzemebachi. Wish you continued this story
| kmate1222 chapter 28 . 2/3/2022
The plot thickens!
| darthkratos24 chapter 2 . 12/23/2021
Go without them... You know that's a retarded idea right? Story wise at least because now you have 13 captains and vice-captains all barring down on one person...no one to distract them no one to take their focus? What kind of brain dead moron would do that? Then you have a few pissed friends to deal with that will most likely never talk to him again. There's no way they can grow together like on canon and if you wanted a romance like you've been hinting at with at least one or two of them now that would never work especially in a realistic sense because they'll always know he never trusted them, they'll always think he'd leave them at the first point... Killed your own story on the second chapter good job
| Doso thabo chapter 12 . 12/15/2021
| taiwoeretan1 chapter 3 . 12/11/2021
Man Ichigo is going to be so OP in this.
| Hoguie chapter 11 . 10/18/2021
Really? All he got for fusing four effing zanpakuto is stabbed twice by Gin?
| Dk676 chapter 28 . 9/19/2021
| Dk676 chapter 28 . 9/19/2021
| Nevarus chapter 2 . 9/14/2021
seemed more like a tomboy friend protecting an innocent friend from creeps because of her assets. don't understand how you could take it the other way... also almost guarantee that the creeper girl who feels up orihime isn't really gay, it's just a thing that some girls do to one another in anime...