Reviews for Out of the Darkness
OptimusPrimegirl213 chapter 1 . 9/19/2015
Keep up the good work loving it
dragoness0420 chapter 29 . 7/20/2015
UGH. So many tears. Christ. These last few chapters have been rough. *clicks Next*
dragoness0420 chapter 4 . 7/19/2015
The formatting on this chapter needs fixed, hon.
YO chapter 35 . 7/14/2015
Guest chapter 35 . 7/14/2015
WickedGreene13 chapter 35 . 7/13/2015
If you do a sequel to this including LOTR storyline, you could focus on Mirkwood, Dale, Erobor, and others banning together to fight the forces of Dol Goldur (pretty sure I spelled that wrong). This timeframe is about 50 or so years after the battle of five armies, so your OC and Thranduil could have an elfling by this time. I can see Legolas being the fun yet overprotective older brother.
That Guy chapter 34 . 7/6/2015
I loved every moment of this and I can not tell you how much I enjoyed reading this it was truly magnificent. I cant wait to read it again. :)
Anon chapter 34 . 6/10/2015
YAY so cute! Loved this :D :D
Aobh chapter 11 . 5/25/2015
I enjoyed the first few chapters of this story very much! Characterisation is clearly your strong suit. I adore the fact that you went down the 'creepy elf' route and the contrast between Mourena being blind and Thranduil's cruelty is truly brilliant.

However, at times your story is very hard to follow. Simple spelling mistakes and words added in where they shouldn't be make it difficult for the reader to be able to fully immerse themselves in your work. I kept finding myself jarred out of it's flow by a sentence that simply made no sense or by passages that seemed to have no connection to the previous one. For example, in Chapter 7 when Legolas comes to tell Thranduil that the dwarves have escaped Thranduil handed Mourena to the servants and said "Return her." Yet, in Chapter 8 she is suddenly with Eroiwn in the weapons room training. Why is she there? Who told her to go there? If it was Thranduil why would he make her train while she was drunk? I think all you need to do is tease out sections more and always remember to proof read. Writers always forget that the reader is not there in their mind too (I struggle with this immensely) and that things must be simplified sometimes.

Other than that, I like where the plot is going!

Your dialogue is on point! I am envious of your abilities when it comes to middle earth sentence structure. It is formal but not so much that it becomes incomprehensible. I look forward to reading more and though this story is already complete, keep up the good work!

- Aobh (:
Pineapple3000 chapter 8 . 4/3/2015
Is Thranduil a half-elf? 'Cause to the extent of my knowledge, only half-elves can chose between immortality and mortality. I'm happy you share the same thoughts about the hobbit as I do :) This is a nice fanfic and I look forward to more
gothicgryf chapter 34 . 3/27/2015
Fantastic story please write us a sequel xxx
Nuredhel chapter 34 . 2/26/2015
You did a great job With this story, so much work and effort. And i really liked the way it progressed and evolved and the plot. It was really a very Nice tale, you have talent. :)
gginsc chapter 34 . 2/20/2015
Yayyyyy! A happy ending! I love it. I hope you write a sequel.
Enjolras123 chapter 34 . 2/19/2015
So good! Please write more and soon.
Noldesse chapter 33 . 2/15/2015
Ahhaa, Thranduil being chastised by a healer! And suddenly he wants to bestow advice about love, too!
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