|Reviews for One Day More|
| alive by grace chapter 21 . 4/16
That was a beautiful speech Obi-Wan gave at the end. :)
| Kimichan13 chapter 21 . 3/31
| Souffle Girl in a Blue Box chapter 21 . 11/10/2014
Fantastic work! I love to see Obi Wan happy in the end, and the conclusion is really nice and hopefull. I enjoyed reading it a lot. :)
| Aka-Baka Hoshi chapter 20 . 7/23/2014
Tee hee. I have to admit, I would like to know what else, besides better relations between Obi and Qui, changed in this new future. Any chance of that happening? Or have I already asked that? I can't remember, I've typed enough reviews for so many good stories like this that they've all melted together.
| Aka-Baka Hoshi chapter 19 . 7/23/2014
Yay! Obi chose right! Now we get to see what happens next!
| Toaofwriting chapter 21 . 5/4/2014
Wonderful. Great job.
| 1sunfun chapter 21 . 9/2/2013
| Book girl fan chapter 21 . 4/29/2013
A wonderful ending. Everything turned out alright. It isn't the big things that make the difference, but the little things that happen every day.
| Starhunter79 chapter 21 . 2/27/2013
Great story. It as beautiful, sad and hopeful at the same time. Obi Wan's quest to change the universe lead to his discovery of true wisdom. I loved how Obi Wan tried to save everyone else and forgot or disregarded the fact that he was being given the chance to be happy. He is too good and too concerned with others for his own good, at times. Obi Wan seems to be his own enemy; he is is own undoing. The moment Obi Wan finally realizes he doesn't have to shoulder the burden of the galaxy, that he can focus on his own happiness is when he succeeds in his mission.
My heart broke when Obi Wan was forced to watch the torture and murder of the two children. That was the worst thing that could have been done to him. He was helpless to stop it or even alleviate their suffering. I loved that Anakin sacrifices himself to save his master even while Obi Wan is trying to do the same for him. At times your story made me laugh, cry, scream, frustrated, scared, angry, happy, confused and finally hopeful. Your characters came alive for me and I loved it. I had so many question and ideas, I didn't always agree with your ideas of how different choices would play out. But I enjoyed those conflicts because a great story will engage the reader fully, at least in my opinion. I feel that if you don't question and/or feel conflicted with a story and its conclusions then it didn't really connect with you.
Obi Wan was the true chosen one and no body realized this. Natira told Obi Wan he was being giving a chance to 'chose' a day to relive. Actually he was given 3 chances to relive 3 different days and then make a choice. He got to chose which life to live. He was told that this chance was never given before and would never be offered again. Obi Wan is the 'chosen one' who would bring balance to the force. But he had to learn that in order to bring balance to the force he had to bring balance to himself. Self sacrifice is good and noble, but sacrificing your self just because you don't think your life is as important as another's is wrong. Sacrificing yourself just because you can is not right. Obi Wan has to realize he can be happy and help change the future at the same time. He doesn't have to do everything himself, he has to balance his happiness and his sense of duty to the galaxy. (I hope you understand what I'm trying to say)
Thank you for your wonderful story. I know my review rambles on but I follow my feelings, emotions and ideas when reviewing. To try and let the author see and feel how their work affected me. I would love to see how Obi Wan, Qui Gon and Anakin's life turned out in this new timeline. Hopefully there is a sequel. When does Obi Wan go through his trials, seeing that he is already a master. Does Qui Gon live? What happens to Anakin? What happens to Palpatine? How much did Obi Wan tell about the future? And how does that change said future? So many questions, I love it.
| MJLupin27 chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
Ah, I love this kind of stories :D let's see if it is as good as it's firts chap suggests.. Oh, I got a question though, I'm not a native speaker so I'm not so sure, but I think there are some grammar mistakes, are they or I got crazy when I read this? well, I'll keep going, see you in the next chaps..
| Sanna Black Slytherin chapter 21 . 3/22/2012
Well, a bit late for a review (8 years late, to be exact), but hey, there's no time like the present!
Anyway, I like the idea. It's original, you came up with it yourself and planned in through yourself. Then there is the plot. It's not too much, not too little.
I think I understand why only Obi-Wan's been chosen for this experiment. Besides the official reason Natira gave, that he was the most selfless person that would ever live (or something like that), I realized just WHY. Because hello, there had to be other selfess jerks à la Obi-Wan.
What was special with Obi-Wan, and one could notice it in this last chapter, was that he, until now, couldn't really understand sheer happiness. I quote Obi-Wan here: 'The only way we can really change the universe is by changing our own perspective of it. (...) Evil doesn't suddenly spring into existence with one major event, instead it creeps up on us every time we allow suspicion or anger or even duty to override the sheer joy that life gives us everyday. A man who truly loves life, and enjoys it to the fullest extent possible can make a greater difference than one who sets out to change the universe.' When I read it, I realized that Obi-Wan, until now, didn't know of this 'sheer joy that life gives us everyday'. In order to understand it, the Force HAD to give him the opportunity. Ergo, this fic.
You really made me think about life's meaning here. Be damned (you seem to have thrown a kriffin' philosophy curse on me) and be blessed because you wrote a fantastic fic.
| ml101 chapter 21 . 3/27/2011
Can't believe I just found this story now...I absolutely love it!
| Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 21 . 2/24/2011
I like your moral. Very nice. Interesting end. Obi-wan certainly does deserve it. :)
| Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 14 . 2/24/2011
Booyah Obi-wan! Okay, one thing I have to say, switching back and forth so suddenly really gives the flow a choppy feel, especially with no breaks inbetween (* * * *, or xXx, or even a line/pagebreak).
| Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet chapter 13 . 2/24/2011
*cries* NO OBI-WAN! DON'T DO IT! Dang, you're good. As a writer, I mean.