Yeah... no. I will not continue reading this story.

I struggled against the bad grammar with the thin hope that the scenario would be somewhat good, but eh...

The pacing is slow as fck and 90% of what happened between the time that our heroes hit the mysterious temple and now is utterly useless. Harry doesn't learn anything, nor his power grows or his character evolve. The story is pretty much always the same shit: They progress into the cave system, shit happens, and the author throws a useless cliffhanger that is resolved in the few first lines of the next chapter, only for the pattern to repeat.

Utterly boring if you want my opinion.

I am very disappointed about this story that could have been good. Good job to the author that was able to write that much not in his\her native language even if the result is subpar.

Why is Hermione Harry's friend? Being at the Burrow "and being able to know what's going on". Is her insatiable need to know everything the driving force behind the friendship? Nearly everything exciting that happens seems to circle around Harry. Being close to him lets her know things others don't. Incredible story, will start part 2 this evening. Thanks

No one heard of warming charms? Not sure where it comes from, but isn't Gabrielle 8-9 years old? Schooling starts at 11, how is she with Fleur? The actual gathering before dinner was very nice. Too bad canon didn't work that way.

Great story

Earth that stuff at the end boooooooring

The writing sucks. To bad since the focus on cursebreaking is really interesting.

Apologies. I just saw that English is your second language. For that, your writing skills are really impressive. But still, get someone who is a native speaker to help polish your writing. I know my German is even less proficient than your English, so again my compliments on your skills. Keep on writing - your skills are very good!

Please get a beta to review your writing. It is distracting and irritating for simple mistakes. You repeatedly use “ trail” which is a path or primitive walkway . When you mean “ trial”, a legal procedure to determine guilt or innocence. Many more examples throughout your story. Grammar is a tool for a writer, and if you don’t know how to use your tools well then you are a poor craftsman. Fix your grammar, please.

I adore this story and can make sense when you sometimes use the wrong word. the only one driving me nuts is silently.
silently means without noise or sound. I think the word you're looking for is quietly.

Damnit, you don’t dump it on a kid. I hope Harry mentions it to Bill

You are moving the story. Good

I don’t share your optimism about Dumbles. Thanks for not making Remus blindly loyal to the Headmaster

Good

Getting him clothes that fit Issa important as feeding him

Great premise, fun characterizations, and a reasonable plot.

I can overlook any grammar issues for a great story. I just autocorrect in my mind

Your arithmancy explanation is terrible, which leads to curse breaking going from extremely exciting to data entry.

Just William shut the fuck up