|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Magic of Life|
| sylnael.floch chapter 35 . 10/6
Yeah... no. I will not continue reading this story.
I struggled against the bad grammar with the thin hope that the scenario would be somewhat good, but eh...
The pacing is slow as fck and 90% of what happened between the time that our heroes hit the mysterious temple and now is utterly useless. Harry doesn't learn anything, nor his power grows or his character evolve. The story is pretty much always the same shit: They progress into the cave system, shit happens, and the author throws a useless cliffhanger that is resolved in the few first lines of the next chapter, only for the pattern to repeat.
Utterly boring if you want my opinion.
I am very disappointed about this story that could have been good. Good job to the author that was able to write that much not in his\her native language even if the result is subpar.
| Millie072 chapter 69 . 6/13
Why is Hermione Harry's friend? Being at the Burrow "and being able to know what's going on". Is her insatiable need to know everything the driving force behind the friendship? Nearly everything exciting that happens seems to circle around Harry. Being close to him lets her know things others don't. Incredible story, will start part 2 this evening. Thanks
| Millie072 chapter 51 . 6/12
No one heard of warming charms? Not sure where it comes from, but isn't Gabrielle 8-9 years old? Schooling starts at 11, how is she with Fleur? The actual gathering before dinner was very nice. Too bad canon didn't work that way.
| Abigail Guerrero chapter 69 . 5/4
| Guest chapter 14 . 3/4
Earth that stuff at the end boooooooring
| Guest chapter 7 . 3/4
The writing sucks. To bad since the focus on cursebreaking is really interesting.
| Claire Boston chapter 9 . 2/16
Apologies. I just saw that English is your second language. For that, your writing skills are really impressive. But still, get someone who is a native speaker to help polish your writing. I know my German is even less proficient than your English, so again my compliments on your skills. Keep on writing - your skills are very good!
| Claire Boston chapter 7 . 2/16
Please get a beta to review your writing. It is distracting and irritating for simple mistakes. You repeatedly use “ trail” which is a path or primitive walkway . When you mean “ trial”, a legal procedure to determine guilt or innocence. Many more examples throughout your story. Grammar is a tool for a writer, and if you don’t know how to use your tools well then you are a poor craftsman. Fix your grammar, please.
| lilashannah chapter 32 . 2/17
I adore this story and can make sense when you sometimes use the wrong word. the only one driving me nuts is silently.
silently means without noise or sound. I think the word you're looking for is quietly.
| csheila chapter 4 . 2/6
Damnit, you don’t dump it on a kid. I hope Harry mentions it to Bill
| csheila chapter 3 . 2/6
You are moving the story. Good
I don’t share your optimism about Dumbles. Thanks for not making Remus blindly loyal to the Headmaster
| csheila chapter 2 . 2/6
Getting him clothes that fit Issa important as feeding him
| csheila chapter 1 . 2/6
Great premise, fun characterizations, and a reasonable plot.
I can overlook any grammar issues for a great story. I just autocorrect in my mind
| Idrinktomuch10 chapter 4 . 12/16/2022
Your arithmancy explanation is terrible, which leads to curse breaking going from extremely exciting to data entry.
| wolfstar211861 chapter 1 . 11/2/2022
Just William shut the fuck up