Reviews for Harry Potter and the Magic of Life |
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gdu3rd chapter 18 . 11/4 Oddly enough, my mother gave me the same advice. Except she said “You get a girl pregnant, I will f*ucking” kill you.” |
oldergent chapter 40 . 9/9 i left a comment in a previous chapter but don't think it was accepted because i tend to read stories without actually signing in... that said my comment is this: you often use the word silently when the appropriate word should be quietly for example... He spoke silently should be He spoke quietly unless people are talking using sign language or by reading lips without speaking out, speaking silently can't actually be done... unless you are talking telepathic communication |
sv69n chapter 69 . 7/14 Very nice. Chapter number also nice. |
homesvt chapter 2 . 3/12 Bill is the one who has the long pony-tail like hair and earing... its weird reading abt Charlie like that |
nightwolf99 chapter 56 . 2/27 I've read to this point, but i just found that you haven't done the second book yet. i like to read everything altogether, and you have yet to update. great fu**ing story. i mean, really great, dont get me wrong, but i have my tastes, and i hope you feel better to write. you have my favorite for you and the story. good luck |
nightwolf99 chapter 36 . 2/26 my only complaint so far is that bill didnt put aby wards along the way through the way to the philosiphers stone. he ould have stopped the pesures sooner. |
El Publicano chapter 69 . 2/25 Wow, amazing story! Gotta admit, I'm totally into the whole plot, even the intense parts with Harry getting all angry and hurt, arguing with Daphne, and stuff. But hey, they're teenagers, so the attitude fits perfectly. It's awesome that everything gets sorted out in the end, and yay for love :) The only thing that bugs me is Voldemort pulling off the "unnoticed" act despite the magical camera broadcasting everything. But hey, gotta have some plot twists, right? No complaints here. I love how the characters develop in this story, letting the kids be kids and act like it. Sirius being all overprotective with Harry, and Remus too. The Greengrass family is cool (interesting twist with the matriarchy thing. Maybe Daphne will turn Harry into a Greengrass, wink wink). And the subplots with Bill and Fleur, Narcissa Malfoy, among others, are great too. |
falseproffitt chapter 35 . 1/26 your fucking retarded and now i give up this story... Blacklisted |
falseproffitt chapter 19 . 1/26 Once again, it's like you just randomly write shit just to fill space. You've already covered that spells are arithmetic equations. And yet you go and add shit about spells being the opposit of what they were intended? That's not how magic works much less math works and another thing the puzzle needed specially translated but luna could just speak stupid English gibberish and viola? |
falseproffitt chapter 17 . 1/26 once again giant plotholes that make no sense. |
falseproffitt chapter 15 . 1/26 I liked your story premise is good but god you leave such annoying plotholes. like really, he almost died twice but he's still having to be told it's dangerous and that people die? he's been told that these things are highly sought after and that there could be danger but see's a campfire and dismisses it? seriously your plotholes are widening fast |
maiqsmail chapter 5 . 1/3 Alright, I appreciate not bashing the Dumbles but the erratic narration just irritates me off. And punctuation, do you even comma? English is very simplistic in this regard, Russian has like thrice the amount of punctuation marks and here you're not even doing the minimum required for English. When Harry "rolled with his eyes", I have had enough. Discontinued, even if the story seemed decent so far. |
maiqsmail chapter 1 . 1/3 Some awkward orthographic mistakes here and there, but sorry it's mostly coherent and this twist with Dursleys declining Harry from and board is surprisingly new so I'll keep on. |
sylnael.floch chapter 35 . 10/6/2023 Yeah... no. I will not continue reading this story. I struggled against the bad grammar with the thin hope that the scenario would be somewhat good, but eh... The pacing is slow as fck and 90% of what happened between the time that our heroes hit the mysterious temple and now is utterly useless. Harry doesn't learn anything, nor his power grows or his character evolve. The story is pretty much always the same shit: They progress into the cave system, shit happens, and the author throws a useless cliffhanger that is resolved in the few first lines of the next chapter, only for the pattern to repeat. Utterly boring if you want my opinion. I am very disappointed about this story that could have been good. Good job to the author that was able to write that much not in his\her native language even if the result is subpar. |
Millie072 chapter 69 . 6/13/2023 Why is Hermione Harry's friend? Being at the Burrow "and being able to know what's going on". Is her insatiable need to know everything the driving force behind the friendship? Nearly everything exciting that happens seems to circle around Harry. Being close to him lets her know things others don't. Incredible story, will start part 2 this evening. Thanks |