Reviews for Harry Potter and the Magic of Life
Bronze chapter 2 . 1/8/2020
I'm enjoying this but some of the sentences are hard to read. Some of the words are wrong and others I just can't figure out what the sentence was supposed to mean. Please take some time to re-edit these chapter to correct these errors. Now I use to refer people to a story called Harry Potter and the Super Robot Wars as a good story with horrible writing. Meaning the sentence structure was a real mess, some of the words were in the wrong place and, punctuation was a nightmare! However, the author has since cleaned it up and now it's so much easier to read and enjoy. Now while yours isn't anywhere near as bad as that one was it does need a bit of editing. Please consider it. I swear I'm not a Bata reader either! Not with how poorly I spell!
csheila chapter 69 . 1/10/2020
Just as heartbreaking as Canon but without the unnecessary death.

Not liking how Harry suddenly mutes himself on key details. But trauma explains.

U did an AMAZING job with this story. Keep nurturing your talent.
csheila chapter 67 . 1/10/2020
Whoa terrific
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csheila chapter 64 . 1/9/2020
Nice and realistic
csheila chapter 63 . 1/9/2020
Ooh boy
csheila chapter 62 . 1/9/2020
Love it when Sirius goes Daddy Macho or perhaps Daddy Hysterical
csheila chapter 61 . 1/9/2020
csheila chapter 60 . 1/9/2020
Wow, I never should have doubted or questioned. You got Ron the help needed.

Now hook up Lavender.
csheila chapter 59 . 1/9/2020
Great scenes. Like Harry’s judgment.

Again Ron needs real help. Probably medical with appetite and tenper
csheila chapter 58 . 1/9/2020
Okay you even sold Ron to me. But keep him from Hermione. It’s just not right.

Great scene between him and Harry
csheila chapter 57 . 1/9/2020
You have scary villains.
csheila chapter 56 . 1/9/2020
Such a good job. Your changes allow you to flesh out each character
csheila chapter 55 . 1/9/2020
Interesting twist. Love how they handle it.

Great flying scene.
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