Reviews for Harry Potter and the Magic of Life
Freddie Rindklip chapter 14 . 11/8/2021
I am just finishing Chapter 14 and am really enjoying this fic.
There are numerous incorrect words used throughout this fic. Is English your first language?
kblankenship1025 chapter 69 . 10/18/2021
Tbh the ending was horrible. Good enough read though. Spelling is first. Then said silently. Then maybe a few comma rules.
kblankenship1025 chapter 58 . 10/18/2021
Why is Harry apologizing here? It’s ridiculous.
kblankenship1025 chapter 57 . 10/18/2021
Too many words into the description of the gala. You could emphasize the wealth a lot easier with less is more here.
kblankenship1025 chapter 57 . 10/18/2021
You really need to fix said silently. My greatest pet peeve.
kblankenship1025 chapter 51 . 10/18/2021
Not a lot to complain about. Done misspelled words. Decent plot. Above avg writing. Shame I won’t see the end of it.
kblankenship1025 chapter 40 . 10/18/2021
You never had Harry let Fleur know. At least send a patronus.
kblankenship1025 chapter 39 . 10/18/2021
You keep saying said silently. You have to stop. I’m gonna kill myself.
kblankenship1025 chapter 39 . 10/18/2021
You mix up Fleur with Daphne.
kblankenship1025 chapter 32 . 10/18/2021
If Harry doesn’t mention Fleurs famous last words to her this book is a lost cause. Not really but I’ll be disappointed.
kblankenship1025 chapter 28 . 10/18/2021
There’s lots of spelling problems. Not unignorable but plenty. Still choppy. Very short decorations and moving on to the next line interrupts the flow.
kblankenship1025 chapter 19 . 10/17/2021
Hmm you have a lot of lines. This isn’t a poem. Make sure you have paragraphs. It’s very choppy. But I like the story.
kblankenship1025 chapter 18 . 10/17/2021
Bill shouldn’t be encouraging it lol. P
kblankenship1025 chapter 10 . 10/9/2021
Talking silently. That’s really the most bothersome typo in every fic. Mind boggling how one talks silently.
kblankenship1025 chapter 6 . 10/9/2021
Haven’t read much. Lots of grammar mistakes but not unmanageable.
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