|Reviews for Spirit of Fire|
| cindermane chapter 5 . 2/26
Okay. I'm not one to review a whole lot before the story is over, but my holy goodness, I am amazed at how excellent of a job you have done. The writing is quite simply fantastic.
There are of course issues, as they're always are, but they are small, nitpicky things. Mainly how you adress titles. When saying things like soda and candy bars, you'd just capitalize. The italics is saved for novels. You don't even italicize short stories.
Of the top of my head, I can't really think of anything else wrong. Now on to my favorite parts.
It's interesting, I find myself deeply attached to these characters which I know nothing about. I know what's coming, and I dread it for the simple fact that it will hurt them. That's a job well done in that department, which is something I don't find a lot of authors able to do.
My favorite part is your hinting at Sailor Mars, with Phobos and Deimos, and the appearance of the Mars symbol. I really enjoyed the end of this chapter, when they visited Takara, and I get the feeling they're the ones that were excited in the rain.
Once again, overall excellent job. I've definitely learned a lot just by reading your writing. I'll probably review again, so till next time.
P.S. Sorry for the long review.
| espd chapter 21 . 4/7/2016
one of beautiful stories i've ever read. also make me cry a lot. I have no idea rei's life is so miserable. thanks for making a great - touching - lovely story. keep up your great work :)
| Guest chapter 16 . 9/10/2014
This is a lovely and well written story. However - I have some issues with it. Buddhism and Shinto are two DIFFERENT religions. A Buddhist funeral rites would not be performed at a Shinto funeral, nor would a Buddhist priest be performing it.
| Rubies-In-My-Bloodstream chapter 5 . 9/18/2011
Ah Rei sure comes in with a bang. And Phobos and Deimos(im asuming those are the two crows, Rei's grandfather was talking about) reacations were great. I just wonder about the voices at the end. Rei's parents from her past life? Queen Serenity and Pluto possibly? I guess you know though. Anyway billiant story so far.
PS/ sorry for the long review, i just made longer,
| leneypoo chapter 18 . 7/24/2011
Okay, I am glad Rei did not let her father wuss out of that confrontation. I was yelling at the screen 'omg don't leave, don't you dare leave!' I would have started crying again if they couldn't come to an understanding. I honestly did not know whether they would be able to do it in this story. But I was hoping and I'm glad that they did.
| leneypoo chapter 16 . 7/24/2011
This story has been pretty much a slow tragic trainwreck the whole time, but this is the chapter that's making me cry. Hino-san and Rei are scarily alike. Minoru was right. And I really hope that since reconciliation never happened for Hino and his father, or even Takara and her father, maybe Rei and her father can break the cycle before it's too late.
Rei and her father have people who love them and they seem to want to at least like each other, but it's so sad that they're scared.
| Gemna chapter 21 . 1/25/2011
This entire story was absolutely fantastic. I loved every word of it, and could not stop reading it. Fabulous work. I think the ending was exactly right. It was never going to be perfect for them right off, and might never be, but as you said, it was enough. Bravo!
| PriestessHelene chapter 21 . 12/24/2009
Sniffle-Those are some beautiful scenes. Wonderful job!
| BlueLion chapter 21 . 12/23/2009
nice addition, fitting to the season!
Have a happy Xmas yourself!
| xoxoPAUxoxo chapter 21 . 12/22/2009
This is the best character study of Hino Rei, I've ever read, thank you so much for sharing it!
| For Eden chapter 18 . 10/25/2009
Wonderful! I enjoyed reading the fic a lot. I usually don't read many non-UsaMamo fics but I decided to give this a shot and I'm glad I did.
I am quite glad you based the fic off of the manga because I feel Rei's character in the anime was annoying. I felt bad and also frustrated with Rei's father - in the beginning he was quite an ass, as expected, but as the years ago on and he finally isolated himself, he was starting to realize how much he cared. I was glad to read a fic where her father isn't just a stupid politician that was cold hearted and would use Rei as a tool ... especially the part where he defended Rei for her 'assault' accusations. It goes to show that he still believed in her and her character. The check part and the emancipation part really did make me feel so sad. It was just the fact that they were unable to communicate with one another ... Beautiful written.
I also loved Rei and Minako's interaction and friendship in this fic. Something that is quite apparent in both the live action and sort of part of the Stars season. Your original characters I felt added to the plot quite well and were not annoying at all.
Great story. It was a wonderful read.
| oxomoonieoxo chapter 19 . 12/26/2008
I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading this story. Your writing style is really beautiful yet quite simple at the same time, in a way I didn't know was possible. You really create emotions so well that I couldn't help but empatize with practically ever character. The plotline is so simple as well but you really created something with so much depth and personality that it was a delight to read. Anyways, I hope you continue you writing because you truly are gifted.
| Rena H.M chapter 19 . 12/13/2008
Such a lovely sweet story you have here. I hope you keep on writing.
| BlueLion chapter 12 . 12/7/2008
Fortunately, it her stop, Sendaizakaue, right in front of the Hikawa shrine.
probably: Fortunately, it was her stop, Sendaizakaue ...
From their spot, they could see miko’s amethyst eyes were filled with regret.
they could see the miko's amethyst eyes were filled ...
She couldn’t imagine the pain the miko was going through at the moment.
wouldn't that be "She could imagine the pain the miko was going through ..."
The only thing Tanaka Sayo deserved was black eye and a broken nose.
"The only things Tanaka Sayo deserved were a black eye and a broken nose."
but ever since the ugly scene with Mrs. Akiyama and the other parents,
You could use Akiyama-san instedd of Mrs. Akiyama here ...
Yes, it does, unless the enemy has decided has suddenly decided to change their strategy.
one "has decided" too much
She had to make sure those girl were alright.
"Moon Power! Transform me into a stewardess!" Usagi yelled.
Oh come on, this is Usagi you're writing about. Her phrase would undoubtedly be "Transform me into a beautiful stewardess!"
her trademark blonde pigtails had been shortened to only two odango
how about odangos instead of odango?
She reached for the brooch pinned in the center of her bow on her uniform
... in the center of the bow on her uniform
They couldn’t have vanished.
How about "They can't have vanished."
Use your Moon Frisbee!
Hmm, I'm not famiar with the manga version, but I recall it's called "Moon Tiara" and the attack spell would be "Moon Tiara Action!"
Keitaro wasn't sure why he had did it
... why he had done it ...
so I immediately thought the worse…
I guess that's the manga story line, since in the anime Jadeite wasn't killed by Rei during her first assignment, but was engulfed in ice by much by Queen Beryl later on ...
| xXMiMiXx chapter 19 . 12/4/2008
I read this story like two years ago..I dont think you were updating anymore back then and I don't remember if I ever reviewed so I'll say it anyways: This is the best Rei/her family story I have ever read.
I think you should write some more extra scenes or a sequel to it. This particular extra scene made me really sad...poor Rei.
thanks for the scene :)