Reviews for Spirit of Fire
Rena H.M chapter 19 . 12/13/2008
Such a lovely sweet story you have here. I hope you keep on writing.
BlueLion chapter 12 . 12/7/2008
Fortunately, it her stop, Sendaizakaue, right in front of the Hikawa shrine.

probably: Fortunately, it was her stop, Sendaizakaue ...

From their spot, they could see miko’s amethyst eyes were filled with regret.

they could see the miko's amethyst eyes were filled ...

She couldn’t imagine the pain the miko was going through at the moment.

wouldn't that be "She could imagine the pain the miko was going through ..."

The only thing Tanaka Sayo deserved was black eye and a broken nose.

"The only things Tanaka Sayo deserved were a black eye and a broken nose."

but ever since the ugly scene with Mrs. Akiyama and the other parents,

You could use Akiyama-san instedd of Mrs. Akiyama here ...

Yes, it does, unless the enemy has decided has suddenly decided to change their strategy.

one "has decided" too much

She had to make sure those girl were alright.

those girls

"Moon Power! Transform me into a stewardess!" Usagi yelled.

Oh come on, this is Usagi you're writing about. Her phrase would undoubtedly be "Transform me into a beautiful stewardess!"

her trademark blonde pigtails had been shortened to only two odango

how about odangos instead of odango?

She reached for the brooch pinned in the center of her bow on her uniform

... in the center of the bow on her uniform

They couldn’t have vanished.

How about "They can't have vanished."

Use your Moon Frisbee!

Hmm, I'm not famiar with the manga version, but I recall it's called "Moon Tiara" and the attack spell would be "Moon Tiara Action!"

Keitaro wasn't sure why he had did it

... why he had done it ...

so I immediately thought the worse…

the worst

I guess that's the manga story line, since in the anime Jadeite wasn't killed by Rei during her first assignment, but was engulfed in ice by much by Queen Beryl later on ...
xXMiMiXx chapter 19 . 12/4/2008
I read this story like two years ago..I dont think you were updating anymore back then and I don't remember if I ever reviewed so I'll say it anyways: This is the best Rei/her family story I have ever read.

I think you should write some more extra scenes or a sequel to it. This particular extra scene made me really sad...poor Rei.

thanks for the scene :)
1010'jin chapter 18 . 7/30/2008
This was absolutely enchanting. Perfect, really. I've more or less tried to steer clear of fics with new characters in them, but I am so glad I read this because it is amazing. As much as I wanted to stop reading chapter after chapter positively dripping in angst and drama, I just couldn't-that's definitely a talent right there. :D
lfleurdelys chapter 18 . 6/1/2008
What a beautiful story, I stayed up too long to read this but it was worth it. You have a brilliant way with words and I liked how you incorporated the manga in there. Tragic but excellent story! I applaud you on such an accomplishment. I loved it! _
Tzarista chapter 18 . 2/3/2008
great story
beccala chapter 18 . 11/17/2007
Wow! I really enjoyed reading this story right to the end. It was so captivating righ form the beginning that I couldn't wait to see what hapened next. I really liked the insight into Rei's early life and I like that it wasn't dominated with Sailor Mars, though a litte more might have been nice. I also like the research you must have put in to get all of your technical facts right. Good job! You should do more like this about the other senshi.
Saturnblue chapter 18 . 9/25/2007
Did you made partial of this story up for Rei's background or does it contain some truth in it? It's pretty good and it end in good note. Good job. Quite realistic showing Rei's side. It's good to read about other solider besides the main Sailor Moon.
ThirdEarth chapter 1 . 4/9/2007
I was shocked when I saw that this story didn't get over 100 reviews yet. Seriously, I have to say that this story is one of my all time sailor moon fanfictions ever. I might have commented on ASMR but I have to comment of FFnet too!

Your consistant writing style, your plot development, amazing descriptions and your character's essence is something that's actually very difficult to find in mere fanfictions, which makes you one of my favorite fanfic authors! Let me just say, I reveled in reading this story and it was worth every hour it took me to read it (it is a long fanfic -wink-) I must say that the intro got me confused but once I was hooked, the transition from Keitaro/Takara's story into Rei's ended up being as so smooth and natural it didn't matter. It also gave a very fresh perspective on how to view Rei's father. Most stories make him seem like such a total and utter asshole, but when you read this story it's like a whole new view on how and why he seems that way. I felt he was the easiest character to sympathize with but also the most frustrating!(I felt like Minoru: I literally pulled out my hair because of stubborn Keitaro while reading this) Anyways, I don't understand how you do it, but your ability to take only a slice of Naoko Takeuchi's story and mold it into something more detailed and empathetic is astounding, so I could go on forever (I already have, lol) BUT I just wanted to say KUDOS! and that I have no criticsm. You rock Yumeko.
Mimi chapter 18 . 8/21/2005
This was a fantastic fanfic and I have now been able to see why Rei acts the way she does.
Raye Hino 26 chapter 8 . 8/23/2004
great stry. You made me cry. How dare you? lol
Airlady chapter 18 . 7/8/2004
This is such a beautiful and well written story. The ending is in complete accord with the entire story.
tkhm chapter 18 . 7/5/2004
Beautiful story...the end is happy, yet sad because of the lost time between Rei and Keitaro. I have one question though, in the prologue, Rei addressed Keitaro as Otou-san in front of Takara's grave, in the epilogue it's Otou-sama...since I think you are trying to do a loop here as the story goes full circle I think you might want to change that.
EmeraldSong chapter 18 . 7/5/2004
This was one of the most beautifully written fanfiction's that I have ever read. It actually made me cry at some points (at least three times!) I loved how you focused on how a lot of the more minor character's interacted, instead of just completely on Rei and Keitaro. I most definitely will be reading some of your other stories.

~EmeraldSong~
jex chapter 18 . 7/4/2004
dang! this is good...i admit, i cried a bit at the end...but who wouldn't? you're a great writer...and this fic proves it! keep up the good work!
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