Reviews for Second Wind
layla-kyoyama chapter 6 . 2/16/2015
Waoo!*0* i love your fic! Excellent history!
DhanaRagnarok chapter 6 . 2/16/2015
Using Conqueror's on Kuro to prove a point? Gotta say, I can totally see Luffy do that - and yet I wouldn't have thought of it myself.
So, well, hat's off to you.
Mr. Indigo chapter 5 . 2/14/2015
I just have a small curious question to ask. Will there be pairings? Cause if not I'm totally fine with it either way, since I love reading this story! I am just very curious if there is going to be any pairings.
Guest chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
I love it!
Guest chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
Same guy as before. I'd also point out that time travel stories often show red flags of being authored by someone with poor writing skills within the first few chapters. Yours has none. I really like most of the decisions you've made that set it apart from most time travel stories. Such as Zoro not wasting time and just ending Captain Morgan's reign, and the character dynamic you've introduced between Luffy and Zoro. The only thing I'm wondering about it why Zoro has improved navigational skills. I could accept your decision to include it, except for the fact that I'm not sure when he could have gotten better. Didn't he only recently regain his memories?
Guest chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
As new as it is, your story definitely has potential. Much more than most new time travel stories. You've done a good job of making things happen differently so that it's not boring. You've also avoided making it too dialogue driven. I hate it when stories show dialogue only and barely describe things. My only criticism is that you should start new paragraphs when there's a new speaker. The dialogue there is can be a bit hard to follow when mixed into the rest. Otherwise, I like this very much. If you keep updating, I'll keep reading. Good luck.
Pizzafan123 chapter 3 . 2/11/2015
I loved how much you updated this at one time. This is the best time-traveling fiction I've read on here so far. You make Luffy balance between controlling him power and being a lot stronger perfectly. Zoro and Luffy meeting up was priceless! I feel bad for Luffy, if it goes in the way of the anime, he will actually know that she is hurting and what is hurting her. Can't wait to read more!
trina chapter 3 . 2/11/2015
i love it! when are you gonna update?
trina chapter 1 . 2/11/2015
i love this story!
keep it up! XD
Animegirl1279 chapter 4 . 2/12/2015
Haha buggy got beat real quick
Monkey D. Funky chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
Posting this again because the ones I did anon don't seem to have shown up. Don't know what that's about.

I really like your story. It shows a lot more potential than most new time travel stories. It's also avoided all of the red flags. It's good that you're making things happen differently. Telling the same story again is boring. The only thing I'd criticize is how you don't start new paragraphs when there's a new speaker. That can make dialogue a bit confusing.

If you keep updating, I'll keep reading.
Animegirl1279 chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
This seems interesting I can't wait to see where it goes from here.
Age of the Geek Baby chapter 1 . 2/12/2015
Didn't notice until after I reread everything, but you might want to add a blanket disclaimer at the start of this chapter and any general warnings for the story overall. You can always put specific warnings at the top of individual chapters.
Still love what you've posted and I'm really glad that I spotted this gem when I did a time travel search.
AotGB
Age of the Geek Baby chapter 3 . 2/12/2015
This is absolutely brilliant. I'm loving every thing about it. Please please keep working on this, even if it takes years to finish. I really want to read more.
Didn't notice anything spelled wrong or other grammar mistakes. The characterization is fluid and consistent making the changes believable and enjoyable to read. Luffy is especially well done, all the more for how ridiculous his character is in general.
I see Zoro and Luffy leaving the world confused by using their shared history as one giant inside joke. That bit with Buggy had me snickering. Please let there be more jabs at each other as the story progresses.
Seriously loving this story. Have fun writing and thank you for leaving me in a giggly and bubbly mood. It really made my night.
AotGB
ps: Thanks for sharing, I hope you have fun writing and continue to enjoy doing so in the future.
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