Reviews for Homecoming |
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![]() ![]() Ginny's first appearance, midway through the story, and it's disappointing. I hate to say it, but given the chapters left, my fears are confirmed. What a darned habit most of you writers have, starting with JK herself, of always ignoring Ginny and downplaying her! There in the background, appearing little, and hardly important. And when she does, it's brief, and then she's immediately overshadowed by Harry or any other character. Terrible waste, with all the enormous potential she has. |
![]() ![]() I must say that I found the beginning of the story interesting, but as I am progressing, it gets worse. Especially that very sexual dynamic between Tonks and Harry. And Harry's lack of personality, who lets it change him completely as soon as he arrives. And we're 4 chapters out of 15, and Ginny hasn't shown up (nor has Bill, though I imagine he's about to at Gringotts), so I'm dreading that it's going to end up being one of those stories where they get together quickly, without having an evolution that makes sense, or that the story ends just when they get together, so little real Hinny despite being marked as that. Overall, you are a writer I really like, I have some of your stories as favorites, but the difference in quality of those with some I'm finding lately, leave me amazed, because it seems like they were written by someone else, someone who doesn't have the talent you do show in other stories. And I'm very sorry to see that happen. |
![]() ![]() “But where is Ginny?” Lol. Gotta say though, the sexual tension that’s building up between them is making me a tad uneasy. I’m North American, so perhaps the English are wayyy more sexual as a culture. Still, I feel like all together the volume of come-ons, paired with cuddling and kisses on the cheek with someone you used to have a crush on - and used to masturbate to/stripped for - combined is pretty charged sexually. It’d be ok if they were interested in hooking up, or if all of these things weren’t happening all together within 24 hours. At least what I think. Either way, interesting version of Harry you’ve created, with beaded necklaces and a gold hoop earring! |
![]() ![]() Very exciting! However, given this Harry is also driven by his strong morals, I doubt he would want to willingly have extramarital affairs in secret. Just a small consideration, perhaps you could have make Martine single when they met but now is seeing a couple people. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Generally I am not a fan of the Harry/Ginny pairing and your stories are usually the exception to that rule as they are some of the few with that pairing that I genuinely enjoy reading. That being said, I wish you had shaken things up with this story and had Harry hook up with Tonks and not bothered with the Weasleys. I don't suppose it's that big of a deal really, the mystery arc is far more fascinating to me than the romance angle but I do feel that Harry and Tonks have great chemistry and it just feels wasted to pair them off with the Weasleys. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry is a moron to turn Tonks down. |
![]() ![]() Greengrasses seem to be the obvious bad guys here? Hope this turns out differently as that’s been predictable for awhile. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A bit much with the Lavender stuff, eh? Unless there’s a reason for all that later in the story, it’s kind of odd and distracting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Eyup, called it. Predictable. Nice story though, gives a vibe of mid 20th century American spy stories so it's an interesting crossover with potterverse. And am I glad that someone finally broaches the subject of Lifted Veil scenario. Canon EWE is total bollocks. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Shoutout, reading 1/3 of Ch15, Ginny picks the necklace and says she's seen it before. My money say that Greengrass was wearing it. Her whole appearance seems like Chehov gun otherwise. So her farther is Winter guy? Fits their profile too, both Winter and Greengrass are successful businessmen with certain Slytherin ruthlessness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a story and somehow it's already 2/3? Weird. Speaking on pairings, I'd rather have a Harry/Hermione pairing here, honestly. What a potential here for them, a story how they would change the wizardring world together! I know you, author, prefer the Harry/Ginny pairing (total weirdo), so hopefully it'll be at least half as good as Hermione could've done. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Pah, you just want me for my body. You wouldn't respect me in the morning," he joked looololololol |
![]() ![]() ![]() this was a super well written tale. I enjoyed your fresh take. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bene bene vediamo che succede |