I've just read up too here so I'm just gonna go over what I have read so far. First things first you have perfectly recaptured the tone and the writing of the show, it feels like a perfect continuation of where the show lead off. You do a great job at taking an updated yet different spin on the more classic spiderman stories, having MJ know from the very beginning that Peter is spider-man and just played along was fun to see be slowly unraveled as I continued reading. There were some low points in your story though, first off is that I am not a big fan of how you have been treating Harry's arc, mainly the fact that you took him out of the story. I know that this is your own story with your own ideas, but having him being sent away to Europe for the second time just feels like an unneeded retread of the show's second season. Also, I think you made him a bit too unlikeable with regard to his and Gwen's relationship. I know that you have to show him slowly get more toxic and imitating his father (by the way, are you going to address the season 2 cliffhanger?) as a way to cope but I feel with him slapping Gwen was a step too far. If you bring him back into the story, I dont think I can see a believable way for me to like his character again. A small nitpick but I dont like the way Peter treats Black Cats father. Yes, peter should hate him, but from what I remember from the show, Peter should recognize that he feels guilty about Uncle Ben's death. It kinda feels like a weird 180 when they meet again. The other small criticism that I have with your story is kind of a continuation of my criticisms of Harry's arc is that we dont see enough of Peter's classmates. We see enough of MJ and Gwen(Dont get me wrong I love seeing those two), but the other characters feel left in the dark, and dont get touched upon and that's a shame because I really do like it when they are brought up. They are just important to Peter's life balance as spider-man as his dating life and crime-stopping (it feels 80 Percent is Spiderman and 20 percent of Peters's social life), but I feel like you are sacrificing that part of Peter's story for more action scenes and world-building. The last nitpick I have with the story so far is how you are writing Gwen, specifically when it comes to her relationships. Gwen feels like she is so emotionally dependent in her relationship, especially when it comes to peter. She is more than a love interest for anyone but a lot of her story just revolves around her romantic life, and it just rubs me the wrong way. Like when she said that she only got involved with science because Peter just feels wrong on so many levels, she should like science because she enjoys it not to get a boy's attention that's so 1970's. Also, the ways she and Peter talk to each other seem weird to me, it just seems all-encompassing the way they talk to each other I can't really describe it any other way. Now I know this sounds like a lot of criticisms but there has been plenty of stuff I enjoyed about your story as well. Like I said before I love the writing for MJ, I love the glimpses we get of her home life and how that has influenced her life going forward. Seeing her perspective on events and how she interacts with Peter, Gwen and the others do wonder at rounding her out to be a more 3D dimensional character. And I really do like the build-up with her and Peter's relationship, how organic (Ha!) and steadily it's gonna be until she and Peter get together. Makes me wonder what's gonna happen with Gwen when they actually get together. Speaking of, it seems that you are following (or at least taking inspiration) from the planned and scrapped storylines for Season 3 and beyond. It helps the fic feel like a genuine continuation of the show, with your added creative spin of course that makes it your own. Your Spider-man and rogues gallery also feel exactly like they did in the show, from their mannerism, their goofs, and how they interact with each other. Spidey feels like himself and so do the villains. Im not yet sold on the idea of having the other marvel heroes being in this story (because at the time of writing the show, they legally couldn't have them in it) but I do like the effort you take to expand the world of the show, and subsequently, your fic and Daredevil, for the most part, fits in well with your story (I feel like he changed his opinions onPeter too fast) and I enjoyed the chatter that circulates him in the background, feels like a realistic way people would talk about superheroes. With all that said, I am amazed that you were able to write a 400k fic and have it finished, with a believable and fun story. Sure I have criticisms of it here and there, but what you have here is a massive accomplishment. I really love this story and I can't wait to read the rest.

I really liked your story, in my opinion Greg Weisman did a better job modernizing Spider-Man than Brian Michael Bendis because he respected the classic and created something unique and you did the same.

It's funny how you changed the tone of the story with the fear of doing something different that others might not like, something Weisman would do with Young Justice a year later.

I am disappointed that you did not consider that The Spectacular Spider-Man and Avengers Earth's Mighest Heroes in the same universe, supposedly there were negotiations to integrate it, but no agreement was reached and they only left a wink that was his belt with his signal.

I don't know if you would read this, but I would like you to write the series of
the Avengers, but I guess you don't write anymore because you're busy in your life.

So the X-Men and Daredevil aren't active yet? It's just Spidey and the Fantastic Four? Kind of a blow out if you ask me.

Probablemente no leas esto porque han sido más de 3 años de terminado el fanfic, pero quería decir que este es un excelente fanfic y me siento muy feliz de que lo escribieras y de que yo lo encontrara.

Solid chapter with great action. Having a double amputee would be pushing it, but that is true to Carnage’s character.

Especially enjoyed Venom’s redemption, or more accurately Eddie’s redemption. Your flashbacks also explain why he is messed up, though I personally find it a dick move for the Parkers not to adopt him. I get it, dirt poor and all that, but maybe he could get an actual normal job to help out? Maybe expand on that for a later time, it would be interesting for Peter to discover his guardians are not the perfect family he thought.

And Carnage is born!

I’ve got to say, growing up I’ve gotten mixed feelings about Carnage. On one hand, his design and abilities are cool.

On the other, there’s really not much to him other than he likes to kill. From what I understand, Marvel was trying to make their own Joker, but Joker was also fun to listen to, and his subtleties made him scarier than expected. Carnage was just out there, and it’s like “Oh”

While Carnage is more or less the same as I remember him, it is fun to see him play off of SSM’s Spidey and Venom. I enjoyed the shots you took at the 90s here, and the action was very good.

So many wheels spinning, and none of them feel like it’s going off the rails! The action was definitely top-notch here, and I loved how this was more a fight between Spidey and the symbiote instead of Spidey and Eddie.

You brought Electro in, and while he was a distraction, he was a FUN one. Of course we had to make some sort of gay joke, but it was subtle enough, and I think you could actually slip this by the censors if this were an actual episode.

In fact, I think this chapter is the most accurate to what the show would have aired if they were allowed to continue for a few more episodes. So kudos to you!

And I’m guessing we’ll be seeing Carnage soon. I mean, your hints were as subtle as an elephant in a grocery store. I’m just questioning how the symbiote didn’t know it could reproduce, but oh well.

I’ll be seeing you next time!

I’m enjoying the build up to the return of Venom here, though I got to question why the symbiote got off of Brock in the first place if the gene cleanser didn’t actually work. I get that it destroyed the bond, but it couldn’t just reattach itself back at the school?

I think its safe to say that Otto doesn’t belong in an insane asylum anymore, he’s definitely better suited for prison now that he’s dropping the act.

I can definitely tell that Carnage is coming, so good job on being subtle about his introduction.

I’m not sure what Peter would have done if Sally talked back to him, but I’m glad he stood up for Gwen. Seriously, what does Sally care what two nerds do? I get she’s supposed to be a typical valley girl, but she’s got a real chip on her shoulder. I don’t even know what Rand sees in her, I’m waiting for him to dump her. Maybe get him together with another nerdy girl.

Personally if I were Peter I’d put a web bomb in her locker; it wouldn’t actually hurt her, and it would put her in her place.

I also liked the talk Peter had with Gwen’s insecurities, and I’m glad you’re bringing her nerdy look back; made her distinct from MJ, and I thought she was quite cute like that.

Why? Just why tf did you have to kill gwen? *sigh* I’m leaving

Enjoyed the talks here overall. In most other media, having both Stacys know Peter’s alter ego would be awkward, but I think you made it work here.

And Spidey’s webs smell like Peanut Butter...my arch nemesis.

Good closer and I’m looking forward to seeing the Spider-Slayers

Overall, very good battle with excellent puns. Glad you acknowledged Harry’s lack of experience as Goblin, as that was always brought up in the original.

I had to laugh when the league of losers came into the scene only to duck out at the threat of death from above.

Liking how you are hinting at Kingsley being the true mastermind but not being the Hobgoblin himself. At least not yet.

And good fake out with Gwen’s death. I know it’s coming, but i feel it is too soon at this point and having death by whiplash has been done to death.

Overall we’re really getting the ball rolling now.

Great story truly

And Harry’s descent into madness begins.

It seems like the timeline here is a bit mixed up. The school already had Spring Break; St Patrick’s Day is late March. I understand, a Green-themed holiday for a green-themed villain. Either this universe has a different date for St Patty’s, nearly a full year has passed or we’re actually going back in time.

Since St Pat is hardly mentioned here, you probably could have done without it.

I’m surprised you took things this far with ending Gwen and Harry’s relationship, but it’s also a good detail to remember he actually did overhear them planning to break up with him.

And it seems Harry’s mom is in on the Gobulin Green as well. I recall Weissman planning on giving her a role, and it’s certainly an interesting one. It’s hard to create a plot twist in a franchise with such dense lore that both makes sense with previous iterations and is still wholly original.

The highlight here was definitely Harry vs Green Goblin. For a while it was reminiscent of William Dafoe’s delusions in the Rammi movies, and then you had the added plot twist of Harry actually being a delusion of GG2. I loved that!

I’m kind of sensing a bit of a pattern here.

Your overall setup and progression of the plot is excellent, on par with the original series.

However, I think thus far many of them are over and done with far too quickly.

I feel when you began, you had rather decent pacing. The episodes were not resolved in single chapters, and you had good fight scenes to go with it.

Lately, though, the action pieces have been getting shorter. This one was by far the shortest. I got no tension with Man-Wolf. He snarled at a few people who couldn’t hurt him, and Spider-Man easily beats him with gene-cleanser. There could have been so much more here; you could have made this an arc where Jameson runs around like a werewolf with Peter putting the clues together for his identity. I guess after battling Kraven a wolf wouldn’t be a big deal, but there were ways to make Man-Wolf threatening.
You even had good motivation: the spores. We could have slowly built up how Jameson Jr had a thirst for power before acting on it.

I think your chapters need to be split into three, so to speak. In shonen anime, one episode is typically equivalent to 3-5 chapters of the manga it adapts (with the exception of pilot and epilogue chapters)

Liked the little Daredevil Easter Egg there.

This was a very interesting explanation of Sandman’s creation (among others).

I feel these chapters are getting too brief though. I’m assuming that each chapter is supposed to be a whole episode, but the original had excellent pacing; it got a lot done within 22 minutes and most everything felt it had the appropriate amount of time.

Here, I feel so much more could have been done. I know Hydro Man is one of Spidey’s lesser villains, but he was just a prop here when he should have been a full character. Maybe stretch out the rivalry between the two elements.

While i enjoy the Easter Eggs to other Marvel characters, having Peter thinking about them is getting a bit annoying. Either just a quick quip about one or none at all.

And Spider-Man should have had a fair shot at Hydro-Man. Make hims Flint’s kryptonite and have Spider-Man on the cusp of defeating him, only for Oscorp to screw him over and then have Sandman sacrifice himself.

In fact, I feel that Spider-Man is getting the short end of the stick in these last two arcs. He either needs to be saved or is only a bystander. I get that Spider-Man is not a Gary-Stu (nor do I want him to be), but there needs to be a way to make him essential to all the villains’ defeats.

I did enjoy the last part though, with the girl waiting for Sandman.

I am still enjoying the story, I just think there are things that could help make it better.