Boo

It is too bad you killed off Mikoto in this story, that kind of killed the whole vibe for me. I mean why have her survive the massacre just to be killed later? It creates unneeded drama when Naruto has already dealt with too much not to mention I was looking forward to seeing their relationship progress after you announced the pairing. To be honest I love the idea behind this story (Naruto eating Ace’s fruit) and the beginning is great but I have to say I will not be finishing this story.

i can see why this is NOT popular

Update

Love the natsu

Put that goddamned Romance tag off and mark it as Angst! Now don't get me wrong, I've nothing against angst but when you put a romance tag I come here to read god damned ROMANCE! Then you go ahead and FORCE a Pairing that you yourself don't like but somehow feel the need to lie about it to force that particular pairing as Main pairing for more than half of the story, then when you get bored of it you decide to off the female character. Now here I'll admit this one would've been a really juicy piece in an angst fic. I'd have come here to read character deaths all over the place just to turn on my inner sadistic self but that didn't happen now. Somehow it just looks to me like you're really angry at the Naruto in Original anime for being so Happy Go Lucky instead of miserable pathetic shit so you wrote this as your guilty pleasure. And Admit it, you yourself didn't have any idea about Naruto X Mikoto pairing nor did you like it much in the first place. You tried hard to impose the pairing on the reader as hard as you could and when it didn't work you offed the lady...

You should not have lead with the fact that you enjoy reading neglect story. because that is literally the most commonly hated type of fanfiction in Naruto.
But i am going to give a chapter a shot though. hopefully it's not as bad as it seems.

can you please pick ths series back up. it's really good.

This story holds so much emotion, I was crying reading it. I just want to give you my thanks for writing such a nice story. Keep up the good work and you can be a writer with this story telling

Yo will there be an update this is goo

As previously promised I would finish the story you’ve got. Up to chapter 20 it was pretty good, my only tiny issue which isn’t a big deal at all is your style of writing where you explain every little detail of what a character is thinking. For example Satsuki will say a line then theirs 2 paragraphs on what naruto is thinking before he replies. I found my self skimming those parts but like I said I don’t mind skimming it or just ignoring those parts. Besides that the story was good. I still don’t like the whole Mikoto x Naruto but it’s chill even if it didn’t end because Mikoto died I don’t think I’d have any issue ignoring the relationship. I hope you continue the story because it really is good, I enjoyed the plot up chapter 20 and the first half of 21. I don’t really see why naruto is being seen for treason under stupid accusations. Like just ask naruto to clear things up. Like accusing naruto for being the reason nawaki defected is just stupid.
Anyways keep up the good work

I think the chemistry in the story is quite messed up, just my personal opinion.

I was enjoying this story so far! But the whole narutoxmikoto is just... no sure she doesn’t matter in the Shinobi world but Narutos 12 and Mikoto is what? 30 something? It’s just weird. I’ll still read the story since I’m enjoying the plot but unfortunately I’m either gonna skip the romance between them or just try pretend Mikoto is like 15-18 or something that’s a little better. I honestly could careless about age difference (my parents are 12 years apart) but a 12 year old kid and a 30 year old woman is just to much. Sorry!
I enjoy the plot though and who knows maybe you make the romance work and prove me completely wrong

So you change everything about Naruto his looks, his personality and just made him and angsty ace

Please tell me that this is an FemSasu x Naru.