Please tell me that this is an FemSasu x Naru.

orange cowboy hat? are u retarded?

This story may be trash but the idea obito being their sensei is pretty good.

Why i feel like this is a bit of Naruto x Mikoto?

This is just like every other neglect fic. Characters with mary sue and gary stu traits, a lack of cohesive character traits(Naruto, Minato, Kushina, Jiraiya, Tsunade), incredibly dumb characters (Minato, Kushina, Natsumi, Narumi), super bad personality traits (Satsuki and Natsuki).
Your potrayal of Shisui was actually pretty good and felt like an actual character.
I understand Naruto is prodigal, but like prodigal does not mean he's like some infallible God character. Your protagonist needs to have believable hurdles. Don't make them Gary Stus and then nerf them to create "threats". It's just lazy writing and doesn't help your story.

Please include character development in your stories. Characters should be treated as people and they grow and change. Make the change organic. Don't say "he changed and now cold" bs, but let the readers decipher that from his actions. Make the change gradual too. Instead of just an abrupt change.

Sorry, if I sound harsh but you have really good articulation. It'd be a shame to waste it.

Wow, this is just so poorly written that I'm cringing from reading every line. If you wanted to do something with this kind of premise—the neglected Naruto—better read Heir of the Rabbit Goddess fic (Now that's a good quality fic). At least learn from it.
You even dumbed down some of the characters, and the interaction between the characters is downright atrocious.

And this story is really f*cked up. Why would Minato and Kushina be so stupid? I mean they were 100 more smart than any other character. And killing Mikoto, Are you serious?
This story is just a trash!

And i always hate when Minato and Kushina are bad people...i mean look at this, they were so sad that they can’t live with Naruto and they MUST sesled kyuubi into naruto to experience harsh life. And you know how happy they were when they met naruto as a grown man.

F u

Please update

Other then my rant, there's also the problems such as.

Him using Ice.

Killing off the sand siblings.

Bringing in more One piece characters, which felt unnecessary.

The Akatsuki shouldn't still be collecting the tailed beasts, or possibly not even exist it's a 50-50.

The fact so many intelligent people, Kushina Minato etc, apparently being stupid. Like seriously
the whole seal thing was ridiculous.

And i'm sure there's plenty of thing's i didn't put down.

The story started off good, but it really started going downhill after chapter 9 in my opinion.

You killing off Mikoto, just killed the story for me to be honest.

I was willing to look past the fact Naruto won't ever forgive his parents, even though 90% of neglect fics do this BS. Honestly i don't get why people do the whole, i'm never gonna forgive you thing.

I can't remember the names of the neglect fics but, there was one where Naruto left to train like in canon, but in the fic he went and helped during the civil war in Mist. While Naruto was there, he saw so many families die. When he returned to the village he forgave his family, because he understood life was too short to not forgive them.

The other one was similar, except he only forgave Kushina, because she actually cared about how he was doing like a loving mother would. Where Minato and narutos sister only cared about how strong he got.

I like the idea of neglect fics, but the whole never forgiving thing gets really old. I understand some people write from personal experience, but one person i don't remember his or her name. But said person is like 30 and still hasn't forgiven their parents for simply not beging around enough, what i said to this person like i've said to so many in real life. Grow the fuck up and move on.

There are so many people who had way worse childhoods growing up and kids who do right now.

Don't Comeback trash HAHAHA

"Temporary hiatus" aye? Bs. Hate to sound aggressive but I hate when authors do this. I know this story will never end but I cant help but hope for the best, and add it to my followed. If this is dropped please announce it, I love this book and I find it incredibly disappointing that it ended.

Keep up the good work.

P.S. this was absolutely amazing thank you for taking the time to write this book.

your literally just copying every neglected naruto fic that has been made... FIND SOME ORIGINALITY FFS