This story is a perfect example of biting more than you can chew. Yo over extended your ambitions beyond your capabilities. It's writing 101. The more twists and turns you add to the story, the more you'll have to unwind or unknot later in the story. You put way too drama and shit in your story, which would have had to have been resolved at some point. This isn't a storyboard to a multi-season show. The amount burned you out.

Gonna have to drop this at chapter 12. Fucking disgusting how you can't let burnt bridges remain. What I mean is, a burnt bridge can never be restored. Naruto's blood relatives incinerated even the fucking ground the bridge was built upon. He has literally no reason what so ever to care about their well-being. In fact, he's more likely to snuff them out.
Shame you can't keep a character in character for an entire story.

this story should have more chapters in it than 21.

I completely forgot about plant guy...

I might be wrong but didnt the akatsuki only go after the tailed beasts because of madara/tobi? I kinda thought without anyone there to egg them on it would be the not so evil organization it was meant to be... Unless new villain is in da house

Ok i read the logic, or whatever, behind the ages of the three siblings. But wtf. How does any of that make you younger or not age or whatever the hell happened. If anything it would make you mature faster to accommodate the chakra.
Or maybe i read it wrong and it meant they just looked younger? Because they aged slower? Thia whole thing could be a lot better whatever the case is. I like the story regardless but it is stupid logic there.

satsuki: what are we gonna learn

naruto: DODGE

noooooo, obito the second in closet pervert

Could you do to me a favor from these two either complete this really good FanFiction or do a version were Mikoto is alive and Hana died instead

So you brought one piece villains into this? I liked the story but your recent decisions have showed me that this story is no longer for me. The blatant switcheroo of Naruto's personality in the middle of the story, His unwillingness to reveal that he already has a contract, the one piece villains, Gaara and his siblings death's and the akatsuki(which shouldn't exist btw), it all pretty much ruined the story for me.

Oof, you do realize that the sun is not made up of flames right?... it is made up of energy, SOLAR energy that takes the appearance of flames, the sun isn't even yellow. That's a color trick, it's actually white.

You could give "Naruto" something like *Flame Avatar* where he would summon a huge Avatar that is manifested by his flames, haki and chakra, (Flames to give form and chakra along with haki to strengthen it much like a Susanoo). The Avatar could be in the shape of a Phoenix, Dragon or just same as Shisui's Susanoo as tribute.

The only thing this Naruto has in common with the actual Naruto is his name and blonde hair(spoilers: which he no longer has). He doesn't have the iconic cerulean blue eyes nor the whisker marks, he doesn't have Kurama so no Shadow clone spam, no happy attitude, he acts more like Itachi than anything, he doesn't have Naruto's iconic wind attribute and probably won't be learning the rasengan, toad sage mode or rasenshuriken. Again, no Kurama or Asura reincarnationno nine tails chakra cloak or Asura chakrano Sage of the six Paths mode. This is more of a OC story with a Naruto name tag on it. I get that you want to change Naruto to your liking and such but there are boundaries you just aren't allowed to cross when you're messing with a already finished character.

The "protagonist having scars and stuff is good for character" is a stupid argument and it only applies for important events in their life, let's say Naruto fought Madara and won but he got his arm severed or maybe he lost and got away with a scar over his eye, the lost arm would signify his win over one of the strongest shinobi and the scar if he lost would be a reminder that he both fought and survived a battle versus Madara Uchiha, understand?

Same if he got a scar protecting someone he loves, that scar would remind him of his self sacrifice and bravery. A scar he got when sparring with his sister doesn't mean anything since it was an accident and everyone knows accidental scars are stupid.(not trying to insult you or anything)

I'm gonna oof if this story contains Naruto/Hinata romance, pair her with Nawaki or Kiba.