Reviews for Team Anko
hakon2feb chapter 19 . 2/13/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Shino has now been made aware of his 'options', so to speak... I wonder what he'll chose, even if the poly relationship probably could appeal to him as something else that would set him aside from 'normal' people. Bah! being normal is overrated i say. We get all the drama, but none of the super powers :p
Anyways... I'm wondering about Orochimaru's 'studying' of Hinata's byakugan... To an outside observer it would appear he's merely testing her reaction speed when it comes to detecting an incoming threat or processing of information. However, it could also be an attempt to teach her how to split her attention, since she lamented that her sister could do 3 points simultaneously while she could only do one. It also fit nicely with Hinata 'defecting' to Sound... Actually, i'm beginning to wonder if the 'defecting' is real or not anymore.
Either way, keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 18 . 2/13/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Hot damn. You had me worried there for a bit. The enemy team sure knew how to hold a grudge... Is that common in the shinobi world, because it would explain why there is so much hate in canon? Anyways... The enemy team prepared their ambush quite well, managing to play things to their advantage for the most part. Too bad it wasn't enough against a trained, serious team Anko.
I'm not sure i should read too much into it, but the assault was especially horrible towards Hinata, basically taking out both her team mates and leaving her alone, as well as those horrible genjutsu. However, she rose above it and managed to overcome them all. It does seem, however, that she's starting to emulate her sensei in the brutality of her takedown of Sachi... I wonder if this will be a permanent change, and/or if it will become more pronounced in the future.
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 17 . 2/13/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
The start and the end of this chapter paints a frightening picture of the world they live in. Just the mention of 'recent war', 'nukes' and other stuff have long-reaching implications for the future of the elemental nations. Sure, the Republic (Any relations to Star Wars?) has just finished a war, but if they chose to expand again it would be laughably easy to overtake the technologically inferior nation. You also manage to neatly wrap up the how's and why's as to the canon tech too, so cudos :) On a side note, i'm wondering how a tailed beast bomb would stack up to a nuke (Even if i know there is no radioactive downfall from a tailed beast).
Also, Naruto and Orochimaru's conversation happened... It appears to have been enlightening for Naruto even if he seems a bit unprepared to deal with it all. With that said, it is an interesting parallel to draw between this Shino and the one in canon. Canon Shino doesn't appear to have any female partner either before or after Naruto The Last, which begs the question if he is in love with Hinata there as well, but keeps his distance due to her affection towards Naruto? It would be interesting to see love relationship grow between all the members of team Anko :)
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 16 . 2/13/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Hinata and Shino are now genin again :) Anko ground them into the dirt, but it seems it gave results by the shining praise she gave them... Although, does that mean the plan about 'defecting' is still on, or has it been scrapped now that Naruto is out of the hospital?
Anyways... Naruto and Hinata are one their first official 'date'. The two are still young and inexperienced when it comes to this, so i guess any awkwardness is reasonable in the beginning. However, i think i might see signs of their current relationship not lasting the way it is now... Perhaps it's foreshadowing, or perhaps i'm imagining things?
Either way, keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 15 . 2/12/2017
Hi again.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Naruto is told of the plan, and we also get an in depth explanation of how shadow clones work in this universe. I think it makes sense, even if that would make the canon clones very simplified in comparison... Perhaps canon Naruto didn't read the scroll fully, but somehow got it to work and never though to ask why and how? It would fit his character, as well as playing up his stubborn side. Since Naruto doesn't retain knowledge from the clones except those communicated to him, it does make utilizing them for training harder, but not impossible.
Also, i'm impressed with Shino and Hinata's progress. Both really seem to thrive under the harsh training, progressing much faster than they would with their slacker of a sensei Kurenai :p Both physically, mentally and chakra vise, they are far ahead of anything possible under canon .conditions. I think people will be greatly surprised at their progress if/when they return to Konoha :)
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 14 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Naruto is released from the hospital, only to wish he was back there again :p Shame Naruto isn't in on the plan, but he can be a bit obvious when it comes to keeping secrets and his reaction will be natural if he doesn't know.
Also, we get to see a bit of Kurama in action... Does armstails, because 5 tails worth of badass should be beyond Naruto at this point... Perhaps it's all about working with or against the tailed beast though, since i think Naruto went 4 tails in early shippuden against Orochimaru and ended up damaging his body greatly. Good thing he was able to calm down though, since i doubt anyone would want a raging jinchuriki running around unchecked.
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 13 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Interesting mission Hinata has taken upon herself. Wonder how that will go over if the other three manage to get back to Konoha without her...
Either way, Anko is trying to grind the two down as har as she can, stopping only short of severe injury. My guess is that if this team lives to join the chunin exam that might or might not be held in Konoha, they'll all advance, because there is no other sensei that would push their genin this hard (Except Orochimaru :p ).
As for Naruto... His first official meeting with Kurama ends up much better than in canon (Being an hour old doesn't count.). True, Naruto is way more mature here, and more prone to actually thinking things through when he has the time. On the other hand, i was actually surprised that Kurama was physically injured from taking some of his chakra. Perhaps i'm just so used to chakra being like magic that i forgot that Kurama wasn't expecting the drain, and thus didn't have any choice in where the chakra came from...
Anyways... Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 12 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Good fight between team Anko and team Sound :) You really let Hinata and Shino shine by showing what they are good at. Of course, the two cover each other quite well with their different skill sets, and even if they were initially outnumbered they played to their strengths and managed to make the enemy slip up.
As for Shino's outburst... I'm guessing it was bound to happen eventually, seeing as he's so used to just bury his emotions. Being in a fight, that will be hard at best, combined with the fact that someone he has an attachment to was in danger made him overreact a bit if attempting to blow someone's head off is any indication :p
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 11 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Seems there are a lot of ingrained routines in the different clans of Konoha by how casual Hinata and Shino appear while in the bathroom. Hinata basically undressing in front of him, and Shino's question about that silk thingy. Of course, Hinata undressing in front of Shino could also in a roundabout way be her subconsciously thinking of Shino as part of her family instead of a love interest like Naruto, and perhaps the same about Shino as well now that i think about it... Man, Naruto is missing out on so much by being trapped in that hospital, real team bonding moments here :p
Orochimaru also got to have a chat with Naruto again. I'm interested by his last question, as it might almost sound like he's planning to adopt other jinchuriki into his village in the future. I mean, from the start, he appeared to want to better the lives of those who join his village, yet it also appears he wants to do better than Konoha, by asking about Naruto's childhood and what could have made it better. It's all so strange with plots within plots, but i guess the truth will come for a day :)
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 10 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
The plot thickens... The discovery of bodies and test subjects below the hospital must have been disturbing. Also, will Shino feel left out since he is now the only one on the team who hasn't killed? :p That strange chakra battery though... I'm wondering what Orochimaru is planning with that. Does chakra bombs exist in the Naruto world? Since, from all the explosive techniques a jonin can perform i would think all of his chakra concentrated would be able to cause some damage. Or perhaps Orochimaru is simply trying to create an artificial tailed beast? Who knows when you are mad :p
I'm also thinking Hinata is coming down with some survivors guilt. Quite a natural reaction, but thankfully she has people to support her. Naruto complimenting her last chapter probably helped a lot too, eve if the kiss might have been a bit rushed. :)
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 9 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Seems Orochimaru really is invested in wanting to keep Naruto alive. Could be to create goodwill, but also most likely hoping Naruto will become an asset in the future i'm guessing. Not sure what the Konoha shinobi will think of the mountain of corpses though...
As for Naruto himself... He was extremely lucky. From what i understand, chakra can help harden your body to impacts to some degree, meaning that some ninja survive being dropped from the 3rd floor of a building. With that said, Naruto didn't have any chakra left to soften the impact, so naturally he was severely injured. Luckily, he has some goodwill with Kami still, so he'll probably heal up well even if eyes seem to be a tricky subject when it comes to Naruto canon.
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 8 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Orochimaru has a talk with Shino this time, allowing him to use his skills in a useful fashion as as giving him a mental conundrum. I actually first wanted to shout that Orochimaru is looking for a way to never die, but there are enough deviations from canon that i'm not sure anymore what he would want.
As for the screaming argument... Well, Anko did say it would happen when the stress was at its highest. Being surrounded by hostileish people can put everyone on edge. Shame about the direct results from that argument though. Naruto killing someone, while Hinata possibly killing or crippling someone just because of a petty argument and tension running too high. I wonder if this will work the same way for Shino as the wake-up call Shikamaru had after attempting to bring back Sasuke the first time...
Either way, keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 7 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Orochimaru works in strange ways it seems... He appears to be the perfect host, even as he admits he has had spies watching them in Konoha. Taking the time to talk with all of them (Hinata especially), as well as his unsubtle attempt to help teach Naruto :p If it wasn't for the underlying tension, i'd say it would have been comedic to watch.
As for team Anko, i'd say they are behaving admirably seeing as they have been pushed into this situation head first. Training kicks in, and they are all engaging those small grey cells in their brains to try and figure things out :) Also, it's not outright stated in canon, but i don't think Naruto really learned how to water walk. Don't get me wrong, he can do it, but we go from him attempting it with Ebizu and failing, to suddenly fighting on water against Sasuke with nothing in between. Fun tidbit, that.
Anyways... Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 6 . 2/10/2017
Hi.
Ok, so another great chapter :)
Genjutsu training was a wake-up call for everyone(?) Seems Hinata's confidence problems aren't so easily bested after all, even if she could hit a genjutsu chunin trained by Orochimaru... With that, Anko really is pushing them hard compared to what we could expect the canon sensei to do. Hopefully none will break too badly, but i'm sensing a screaming match coming up soon :p
As for Actual Orochimaru appearing? That's just mean. On their first mission, and they bump into (more like him seeking them out... (If he's even there, genjutsu and all...)) one of Konoha's top S-ranked criminals. I know this mission has higher stakes than the Wave one, but Zabuza was A rank at best and was fooled by Naruto's 'not-working-like-that-clones'. If it really is Orochimaru, then they really are at his mercy here since even the idea of outrunning him is stupid.
Either way, keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
hakon2feb chapter 5 . 2/9/2017
Hi again (Ugh, getting late, so i'll probably go to bed after this).
Ok, so another great chapter :)
It's Naruto's turn to go into town with Anko. A ramen stand would be ideal, seeing as Naruto probably feels safe at Ichiraku back in Konoha. I admit your backstory of Anko was good, even if she probably wouldn't fit so well into Orochimaru's ideal apprentice mold. Sure, she was dedicated and had no ties keeping her in Konoha, but from what i understood, Orochimaru was already into 'prodigies' by the time they fought Hanzo in Ame (Which i'm guessing was before he took Anko as an apprentice.). Unless Anko glossed over parts, she didn't exhibit any prodigy talents, and even her determination to stay was low enough for her to attempt to run away. Perhaps i'm reading too much into this, but i think the character analysis of both Anko and Orochimaru are interesting (Even if Orochimaru is a sadistic bastard.), and the way you add it to the story makes it come alive :)
As for simply buying their ninja equipment from Shinobi'r'us... I guess there had to be some sort of ninja outpost there, and it certainly beats stealing... Wouldn't want to flee the village with samurai on their tails :)
Anyways... Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.
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