Reviews for Harry Potter and the Travel to Alternate Dimension
Horizon13 chapter 7 . 6/19
Cool story
BROnicorn chapter 7 . 4/23
having power over death meaning he has the power of life too both are related to souls taking them giving them.
BROnicorn chapter 7 . 4/23
return to his dimension? dafuq is waiting for him there? better stay in the dimension with an actual person cares for him and can't he be like bend the rules and extend her life span or something? after all death and life are always together, opposite yet always related.
BROnicorn chapter 3 . 4/23
oh come on. Lily lost 30 years of her life?! Harry better fix that.
BROnicorn chapter 2 . 4/23
hohoho Harry checking out his hot momma from another dimension kinky. looking forward to your updates.
fluffy-fanfic-lover chapter 7 . 3/17
please update soon
Guest chapter 4 . 2/17
Sorry but I quit reading this. I get that albus is a piece of sh!t, but making Harry an even more annoying, arrogant, asshole piece of shift doesn't make for a good story except to immature emo teens with too much angst and depression.
smokeapound chapter 7 . 2/12
i wish there was more
Guest chapter 3 . 1/28
I wish he was more mysterious like on a pale horse not some charmer god that is suave and a lady killer.
Namikaze Uzumaki Potter chapter 7 . 1/10
Awesome! update please
SapphireTheFourth chapter 7 . 9/26/2017
please do continue xxx
Kylifrost14 chapter 7 . 9/9/2017
I hope you will continue this story at some point it is interesting
I'm not ofreakingkay chapter 1 . 7/12/2017
I like you're take on "On A Pale Horse". It's kind of interesting, but it does come across as mildly mediocre. The dialog seems tacky and is generally unrealistic. I recommend reviewing your chapters multiple times throughout extended periods of time. This way your mind can stretch away from it's selective opinion, and you won't read the chapter with bias. I've done this for some of my stories recently (and while reading, I've found that we have a similar writing style) and have caught multiple errors and some sketchy dialogue that I hadn't seen when I wrote and reviewed the chapter. It's merely a suggestion, but it's an enlightening one that's helped me write.
Brigadier7899 chapter 7 . 6/3/2017
I don't know if you are going to continue the story but it would be nice to have a clearly marked beginning to smut and clearly marked ending. So that people like me who are enjoying the story but don't enjoy reading smut can simply scroll down without reading filth. I'm not saying that to be mean or as a flame, but when I read action I don't expect to find nc17 grade smut in it. And simply scrolling to get through it leaves you having to read here and there so you don't miss where the ick ends and plot begins.
god of all chapter 7 . 6/1/2017
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
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