Reviews for Harry Potter and the Travel to Alternate Dimension
SapphireTheFourth chapter 7 . 9/26
please do continue xxx
Kylifrost14 chapter 7 . 9/9
I hope you will continue this story at some point it is interesting
I'm not ofreakingkay chapter 1 . 7/12
I like you're take on "On A Pale Horse". It's kind of interesting, but it does come across as mildly mediocre. The dialog seems tacky and is generally unrealistic. I recommend reviewing your chapters multiple times throughout extended periods of time. This way your mind can stretch away from it's selective opinion, and you won't read the chapter with bias. I've done this for some of my stories recently (and while reading, I've found that we have a similar writing style) and have caught multiple errors and some sketchy dialogue that I hadn't seen when I wrote and reviewed the chapter. It's merely a suggestion, but it's an enlightening one that's helped me write.
Brigadier7899 chapter 7 . 6/3
I don't know if you are going to continue the story but it would be nice to have a clearly marked beginning to smut and clearly marked ending. So that people like me who are enjoying the story but don't enjoy reading smut can simply scroll down without reading filth. I'm not saying that to be mean or as a flame, but when I read action I don't expect to find nc17 grade smut in it. And simply scrolling to get through it leaves you having to read here and there so you don't miss where the ick ends and plot begins.
god of all chapter 7 . 6/1
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
Blazeb79 chapter 7 . 4/14
This is a great story , we need more.
teedub chapter 7 . 3/18
I hope you come back to this story. Though the english is a little rough, it's a very interesting tale you have started.
teedub chapter 3 . 3/18
Did no one notice that Albus changed the terms of the Vow as well? It was supposed to be in exchange for not reporting him to the Ministry for his criminal actions, the traveler would give him three months to return him home. It wasn't supposed to be in exchange for "trying to find a way" back home, the traveler would help them with the Dark Lord. The traveler never said he would help with the Dark Lord problem.
Lord Mortensen chapter 7 . 3/6
great fic! I love it! please update soon! you have 1 year 9 months and 10 days without update this fic!
polarpwnage chapter 2 . 2/1
Okay way to melodramatic, feels like reading twilight. I puked a little in my mouth
knarf3 chapter 7 . 12/17/2016
I'm glad that Hadrian made Lily see reason that he is not her son, so she shouldn't mother him with familial protection. This is good news because Lily is now getting a little bit territorial when she sees other females openingly lusting after him.

This is a very well written story, and I hope you will update it again!
knarf3 chapter 6 . 12/17/2016
A most delightful massacre. Hadrian was right to slaughter the DEs as they dared to slander his image with their cartoonishly evil getups and blood supremacist ideology.

Seeing Dumblefuck's terrifed expression can fuel the source for my patronus for years to come.

Nymphadora must be proud of herself for behaving like a bitch in heat against Hadrian while in the presence of her fellow salad tossers and his mother from another dimension.
knarf3 chapter 5 . 12/17/2016
Well written sex scene, and it's rare to see anyone who is going up against rapist terrorist swines all the while with a dildo lodged inside her cunt.
knarf3 chapter 3 . 12/17/2016
Nice to see Lily checking out Hadrian's (thank you for not naming him as the retarded diminutive 'Harry'!) body.

I have read several of these "Dumbledore summons another dimension's Harry to do the dirty work for the useless Light" type of stories already, and I must applaud you for being the first author I have encountered to have Dumbledore being actually held to account for his unethical actions. The gall to summon a stranger and just assume that they will willingly fight for other strangers is beyond astounding. Hadrian should have stripped Dumblefuck of his magic.
knarf3 chapter 2 . 12/17/2016
A most dramatic entrance ― no less worthy for the embodiment of a goddamned cosmic force.
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