author if your out there pls continue this story . Its interesting and good

Y asi se termina... lastima. Estaba buena la historia.

Ese Dumbledore cae mal casi siempre! XD

There's no way that there's isn't a spell for repairing eyesight, I mean, there's gotta be?

Again; Malfoys didn't se*ually abuse their sisters or daughters.

Oh, come on; not even the combined power of Malfoys and Dursleys can surpass Shinji Matou in just being awful.

this is interesting, but this Dumbledore is soulless like a machine only there to further the plot...

Nor even finished first chapter and I am already not confident in the rest of the story... DUmcledore speak like a scarredy little push over, Minerva talk about killing people in bout of anger?

There is AU, and then there is being unable to wright a personnage approximately right so using AU as an excuse to disguise it... I am not certain which it is so far although I have an idea

... waste

No harem! Are you sure that’s Shirou in there? He has Harem Protagonist: EX and E rank luck. At least give a bit of women troubles to the lad!

that's I've only talked to you - that's after I've only talked to you

make Ron roared in laughter - make Ron roar in laughter

most succeeding - most successful

the blood nodded - the blond nodded

Shirou didn't really offended - Shirou wasn't really offended

I rest my case. :-)

was somehow resemble Matou Shinji - was somehow resembling Matou Shinji

Ravenclaws - Ravenclaw

Again, please get an editor to go over the chapters, they need it.