Great scene, even I lost myself as I thought Vader was talking about young Anakin but only after a few seconds did I go back and realize he was talking about Luke

Such a pity, I liked this semi-dark Qui-Gon who just wants to save the Galaxy from endless suffering... at this moment I am quite curious to know if Obi-Wan will find out why his former master turned to Vader and what they were trying to do, will it break him?

Grandmaster Yoda is perhaps 1 of the few Jedi whom I respect

Qui-Gon’s feelings are understandable, heavier is the weight you carry when you are the only one doing so with honorable desires as others denounce you... sometimes there are only bad choices and we still have to choose that’s how I see Qui-Gon’s decision

Awesome, simply awesome... it was quite logical that the old Jedi Master decided that way and try to reform the Sith Order

I like your story, so what if others don’t... THIS is YOUR story and what sets it apart from others, it’s that it’s YOU that’s telling it. We can’t all be alike and the differences is what sets us apart and gives life meaning. Of course others have their right to not read it for the same reason BUT that doesn’t mean that some people should badmouth or insult others just because they don’t like the story, just don’t read it, it’s not necessary to insult others like I have seen in many fanfics doing just because the author doesn’t make the story like they want

Oh? will he gain a new disciple

Vader growing his faction like he is too bored

Só Qui-Gon will die huh? Gotta say that Vader could have allowed the Jedi Master to survive

Another great chapter, your dialogue is very engaging which flows with great ease

I think your analogy of the graceful fat catethe hungry dog (was it?) was very on point because of the Dark Ones’ actions it can be made such an assumption and the part of just having slight annoyance about something which comes as an echo of a full blown rage from the Dark Side is very interesting... I loved your explanation

That last scene was unexpected since I thought he was going low key

I am truly curious how you will make Anakin meet with the Jedi and Padme

Cosmic revenge is a bitch

Papa Vader XD