|Reviews for Caine Mall Akward Date?|
| listeninggame chapter 1 . 7/6/2015
| Darknessdawns chapter 1 . 6/28/2015
This is kinda cute. Its a little rough at the edges but I very much enjoyed it.
| saragillie chapter 1 . 5/26/2015
The idea for the story is a good one and I especially like the Super Soaker, but it could definitely use some fleshing out. One of the most important things to do when writing is "show not tell." You did a lot of "telling" and not a lot of "showing." For example, instead of saying he was worried about the mall, have him mutter under his breath about not making promises that would compromise her security as they walked in the door.
| PrayerGirl chapter 1 . 5/2/2015