will nod vehicles be introduced

Pretty interesting so far. While there are a few things I'm worrying about, they're more personal and don't really have any impact on your story. Looking forward to more.

Really enjoying this and excited to see what you will come up next! Thanks for sharing and looking forward to the next chapter.

If they think the basic infantry is OP, just wait for the end-game units! :D

By the way, getting Louise a weapon for her "confidence" is a good way to introduce Derflinger. Good one... I do think, maybe, that Louise could instead carry one of the machine guns?

Too dark? Never! One must break a few eggs to make an omelet. :D

I hope this actually finishes, and Louise isn't subservient to the Crown. That's generally how things happen for FoZ stories... ):

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Great story, an interesting idea and quite well written. The only mistake I found was that you used "foot" instead of "food" in chapter 4, "She had access to water in her room so at least she was staying hydrated, but what she really wanted right now was some nice, hot foot".

Another nice chapter done! Poor Kane will never get to show his name.

Why does the runes say 'Black Hand of...' instead of 'Mark of...'? I thought this was a Legion MCV?

I have to agree with other reviewers, using Japanese here is a bad idea, especially when the reason so far is only the show is from Japan. I won't say what others said but I think since you have already started this fiction professionally you should stick with professionalism to the end. (Except the nee-sama part maybe.)

Amusingly, I think this is the first of many ZNT fic that I have read has Derf being bought so that Louise can be restricted, instead of the overpowered crossover-familiars lol

nice references you put there...and the pencil...it seems louise is going towards the leadership route...and a good one..keep it up XD

buen capitulo-good chapter

Cool
Awaiting nezt update

It happens when u get lost in your imagination. Very good fic so far. Hope to see what Louise becomes.

Another good chapter, I love your descriptions and the detail you put in your scenes, you also did a good job managing each character's personality (thats ver hard). Were those references to 'Guide to the Galaxy' and 'Warhammer 40k'? I aprove!
With that said, there are some thing you should take into account:

You over exaggerated the student's reaction, they should be scared (the girl many of them had been bullying for more than a year got acces to some very powerful weapons) but they look more like lemming than humans.

Do not use japanese terms, those break immersion. But if you want to keep them, make Siesta use them.

I think that Tabitha was actually using too many words, but could be wrong.

After the 'flashback' Montmorenci kept talking, but then you switched to Louise without clear indication. You should put a line break there.

I dont know if I was paying more attention this time but I noticed more mistakes: 'aplogize', some 'the' that were missing and things like that. Nothing major but noticeable. I could suggest you some programs to chek your grammar if you like.

Apart from that, great story, keep writing it.

We require more chapters.