Reviews for Fractured
IGT chapter 2 . 7/15
interesting story so far
do you continue the story?
Steavatron chapter 2 . 7/9
"We're ninja. The law only applies to us if we get caught." Gah, I loved that line so much. Please, oh please can I use it in one of my own stories. I have no idea where, or how, but all sorts of plot bunnies are starting to crop up.

That request out of the way, this chapter went pretty much exactly as I'd thought meeting Menma would go, though I didn't think you'd call her that, and I didn't think it would be so soon. I kinda expected it to be around timeskip time, tbh.

That was really nice writing with the one armed girl, though. Her story is pretty compelling and it makes me curious if we're ever gonna see more of her.
Steavatron chapter 1 . 7/9
I had to read this chapter in small doses. I just couldn't get through that graphic lemon about thirteen year olds in one shot.

I mean...it was hot, but...

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...I'm going to hell, aren't I...

Anyway, aside from that, I love your theory about how Yume's memories begin to alter Yami. That's actually a really solid theory and it's well explained...which I really wasn't expecting with the scene that preceded it.

All good so far.
Vulahnah chapter 1 . 2/21
And BOOM! goes the dynamite
Guest chapter 2 . 10/21/2017
nice
ezok chapter 2 . 10/9/2017
This gives a new meaning to the phrase "go fuck yourself".
Keep up the good work.
Determined-OverLord Wang-Yu chapter 2 . 12/1/2016
Wow! WHAT A GREAT CHAPTER! LOVE IT! HOPE TO SEE EVEN MORE! HECK, I HOPE IT'S A HAREM AND THAT FEM. KURAMA, HINATA AND THE ONE-ARMED GIRL JOIN IN OR APPEAR AGAIN! PLEASE CONSIDER IT!

GOOD LUCK!
Mokkel chapter 2 . 11/19/2016
woah! woah! woah! woah! where the hell did this plot come from?! i just in the middle of chapter 2 then BAM an actual storyline is introduced. that totally took me by surprise. anyway hope chapter 3 will soon be published
61394 chapter 2 . 10/12/2016
good story
TheUltimateAlphaWereWolf chapter 2 . 7/17/2016
this is a great story so far and i cant wait to read more, keep up the great work.
Death Destroyer of The Damned chapter 2 . 6/3/2016
Absolutely beyotiful.
desdelor97 chapter 2 . 5/28/2016
This was a great chapter.
Please keep up the great work.
Hellwalker chapter 2 . 5/15/2016
man please update this story i freaking love it. please dont abandon it its way to awesome to get abandoned.
Look what Jesus did chapter 2 . 4/14/2016
Fun story so far surprisingly lengthy and coherent plot so far in this story don't keep us waiting too long on an update now
Trace Reading chapter 1 . 3/26/2016
You should lay off the gratuitous Japanese. "Aa" and "Iie" are yes and no...and somewhat archaic? I dunno. But you don't need to use them. Also, it's Kage Bunshin. Two words. Shadow Clone.

Jutsu has a connotation with magic, so a proper translation would be "Magic of Shadow Clone"...loosely, anyway.
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