PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE! I'm begging you!

Please please please come back to this story! I love where it’s going

jesus christ lmao. i can never predict what will happen with this story

I just finished your story so far. Your writing is so well done and your portrayal of their relationship is so interesting. As much as they hate each other they are both obsessed and tangled together. I’m interested to see how Hermione grows within Slytherin and with the secret society. I’m not sure if you intend to continue this story, but thanks for writing and sharing it! I hope you are doing well and staying safe during this time. :)

I’m really enjoying your story! The dynamic of Hermione and Tom being step siblings is so interesting. Seeing how their interactions change and affect each other is really fascinating. Your writing is really well done! I’m excited to see how the characters will continue to grow.

HOLY HELL THIS STORY! I love how you write! I love your characterization! I love your plot twists! I love your whole writerly brain! OK where do I start?

The metaphors you use are so unique and visceral, like, sometimes it's gorgeous and sometimes it's a bit gross and that just makes it all the more compelling. And the way you call back to them! After the first time Hermione is called a mudblood you hit us with: "That's all it said, but Hermione's blood congealed in her veins. The mud and the impurities all turned to little hard minerals" later. Is this her internalizing that bigotry? I’m not sure yet but I know SHE is still stuck on it without directly saying so and that is hella smooth.

I also dig all the imagery (foreshadowing?) you've got with the snakes and the rotten apple and the drowning it’s very classic and ominous and exciting.

Most of all I love your Tom/Hermione dynamic. They are so twisted and compelling. I love watching Tom struggle for power over Hermione and Hermione struggling for freedom from Tom. “You must be mine forever but I think I hate you” vs. “I can’t wait to be free of you but maybe I'd be lonely without you" just SENDS me. Like part of me wants them to give into that affection they have for each other and come to an understanding (an alliance?) but also I never want them to stop fighting like maniacs.
You create these perfect little exchanges between your leads that stick in my head for ages. They feel just disturbing and REAL enough to leave me feeling off-kilter, but riveted all the same. Like when Tom consumes her blood on the train and of course the infamous Bathtub Scene.

Oh god that scene. There was always an element of suspense in their scenes together because they are both such volatile little weirdos, but after THAT scene I read all their interactions with this undercurrent of anxious anticipation. Which made me worry like "oh god am *I* the Voyeur Mermaid from the prefect's bathroom?" for a hot second. You've just done such a good job of making any future sexual relationship between them feel inevitable, which is PERFECT. "Surprising yet inevitable" is the advice I got for earning those big reveal moments and I have NO IDEA how this relationship is going to change only that it WILL and it has been built up in such a way that I'm going to be satisfied no matter what.

Your Tom Logic is absolutely the best. He can turn on a dime and be legit chilling both in Hermione's eyes and mine as a reader. But he's still a smart n scrappy little kid! I worry about him! Like bitch I'm scared OF and FOR you!

This killed me: Don't do it. He's not hurting you. He's only hurting her. Just her. But a rush of pure fire seemed to course through his veins. He was prepared to watch with relish as the wizard punished his traitor sister, but he was also prepared to hurt him back tenfold, and he was torn between these two warring instincts.

Also this insight: She was clean, but she felt worse for wear. Not that she had fared splendidly before. But there hadn't been such a sense of chaos inside her. She was afraid to give the feeling a proper name. Shame. Ten going on eleven is a difficult age. Children feel everything so completely. Shame is not just shame. It's all the shame in the world.

You’ve got these two figured out down to the last eye twitch.

I bet they are going to be SO FUN as teens. I'm imagining future Tom going to find his father and dragging Hermione along (or she follows him because SPY INSTINCTS) and wow she is going to be an accomplice to SO MANY MORE CRIMES if that is the case.

Speaking of which! The runaway trip to Nottingham and then Crawfoot and the ministry and making them literal partners in crime before they even stepped foot in Hogwarts? That was such a brilliant move it shocked me. It made the whole wizarding world feel much bigger and more perilous for these two. Also you made Tom a Gryffindor and it WORKS you are clearly a story genius.

Even if you choose not to continue this story, I hope you never stop writing.

This is interesting! I’m a bit sad to see that it’s unfinished though... Because the premise is good and adds another dimension to their relationship, that they know each other before they entered hogwarts and live together

Me, 6:09 AM, drinking caprison and eating goldfish:

I should be worried about the sortings, but really, I’m more interested in finding out what Tom’s weak spot really was.

Laughed for a good minute and I think I’m either stupid or going crazy.

I just finished your fanfic - it captivated me throughout and I'm so excited to read whatever you upload next!

Really awesome concept! I hope you’re doing okay, as you said you’d post the next chapter in a week or so, and we haven’t heard anything from you!

I really hope Hermione rises in the Slytherin ranks, and slowly learns the Slytherin ways, so she can deal with Tom and gain an upper hand. I also hope she gets at least as powerful as Tom!

Maybe even a Dark Lady in the making? Who knows?

I was *shooketh* when you put Tom in Gryffindor! As the hat was going on, I started noticing where it was going and I was like “OH SHIT!”

Anyways, lol, keep up the awesome work and we’ll be here when you return!

Please update soon, amazing work
Kudos from Brazil *-*

Soon it'll be a year again. When authors disappear like that, I get worried that something has happened to them.

What a place to leave off here! I hope you get the chance to update soon. I'm curious how this is going to play out!

~Tori

hope you update soon love your work