The story was interesting and decent. I can kinda see why you dropped it though. You've rather written yourself into a corner in regards to Harry and how he handles things. It especially shows in this last chapter. He has really been rather passive in his dealings and all major progress has been by accidental happenstance vice something he deliberately plans and achieved.

Despite the whining.

I really like your Luna and Hermione. You really bring them to life. I also really think the way you introduced the soulmate thing was well done as well.

To go with earlier rant. None of them bother with the map that would tell them exactly who is out of bed. The nurse allows that flimsy excuse. Harry goes to students he doesn't actually know well and not say flitwick who he knows at the same level as the students he's spilled the beans to. He goes to Hanna and ernie vs Susan and in canon those two especially Ernie were not nice to him and in no way had ever done anything special to earn his trust.

That had to be the worst plot forced chapter ever. An Auror who doesn't deal with the victim, doesn't make an official investigation? Sorry but the only time a victim has the right to stop such things is when it isn't witnessed. Not that it isn't traumatizing, just that a member of the police wouldn't be allowed to ignore it legally. This is backed by the whole "code orange" earlier in the story.

If you still write, you should read up on the social aspect of teenagers, before you do another fic like this. 99% of what you've written and consider typical teen stuff is so off base. While I am by no means even close to a full educated person on this, I do have jids in this age range. As a single father I have the joy and pain of all my kids tell me, and they like to tell me a lot.

On a side note, while the story concept is most definitely interesting, there are a lot of plot holes and purposeful ignorance to making it work. For one, you have placed the timeline in 2015, but other than an excuse for a couple of items to exist everything else is ignored. Why, honestly just don't see the wasted time and point.

Another thing that you do is make up canon items that make no sense other than you not knowing them. I say this only because you have started from end of 4th year which means that you used canon for everything prior. This is a common pitfall that is seen a lot, not just in your story.

I don't know what standards you go by but so far what you consider as Mature or explicit, be it sexual or violence barley meets the pg to pg 13 ratings of even now. Granted the closer to the 90s you get the higher the tolerance of those things in media.

All in all it is a good story and I'm so far sad to see that you abandoned it.

On the other hand I can also understand some of the hate (strong word but based on your author notes) that you received.

I hope you didn't burn yourself out and that irl is treating you well. A decent story should never be rushed no matter how much us readers whine, beg, and plead, because in the end if you run out of steam we all suffer.

I love this fic. Please don't give up on it.

feel the basically rolling over on goblin creations is pretty stupid despite it being a fandom concept I'm pretty sure there would be many variables related to the rules when it comes to items like the founders artifacts and such especially with how old they are I just cant see especially in medieval times people buying family heirlooms that have an expiration date of having to return them to their makers when they die considering I'm pretty sure the enchantmentsabilities of said artifacts wasnt something the founders themselves created
just feels shallow that harry didn't even ask if there were any stipulations in regards to said items or any of his family he just said sure you can have them all no problem also considering the sword was left in the hat to be used to defend the school

Thank you for the entertaining fic.

my big problem is finding a good story before it is finished and then not getting back to it. and i was really enjoying this one

A really good story, I love how strongly the story follows the relationships of the group. The addition of other shadow organizations and individuals adds a new depth of story that even canon did not have. I would really love to see where this story goes as I can see a lot more relationship growth along with a very in depth plot.

Thanks for the great read!

you would think that since their imprisonment that the former head aurora would set a trap for volde... it's honestly the most obvious thing to do.

I've personally never liked the world of Harry Potter having anything to do with tech, because everyone does it poorly. in a story about magic, technology shouldn't outstrip it by far. if anything, magic could and should be used to supplement some of the more dangerous technology or possible counters should exist.

take a nuke for example, explain that the only reason it functions is due to specific runes. alternately, have Wards that negate nukes. neither of these are a stretch and I wouldn't be surprised if radiation sickness could be cured by magic.

going small scale, guns shouldn't automatically be overpowered against wizards for a number of reasons. namely, because this implies they are limited to average human reflexes and that all magic is weak. magic users whip spells around in the blink of an eye and duelists can dodge those... why can't they dodge a bullet, if they know it's pointed at them, or shield against it? why would it even be lethal to shoot a magical? why wouldn't magicals be more durable due to their magic?

biggest issue with tech in the Harry Potter world is that magicals shouldn't exist peacefully with non-magicals. humans, especially those in power in governments, tend to rid themselves of threats. magic is a threat that can't be controlled by muggles, aka reason for war.

that doesn't work as a defense when you have to convince them to do the crime. they already did it and continued said crime.

on a side note, ever time I see the whole potioning Harry to get the potter fortune... I roll my eyes. isn't this the same woman from the same family that isn't okay with handouts? flat-out stealing is a much bigger step against those principles. I suppose if that was all a lie, then sure...

I have to question if it wasn't as expensive, if not more so to shatter a soul like that. you know, considering they aren't supposed to be able to do that on the mortal plane (as far as I've read).

Harry quickly simps to Hermione.