The fanfiction is a load of cocks

This is a load of cocks

please continue! I like the theory of this story where there's another world where Luminous is who is he thought to be(cough, pirate class, cough)

PLEASE CONTINUE!

([a voice in my head]-it's really great and it is amazing! I really like your theory and as [I] yelled up there before, please continue it!)

THIS STORY IS SHIT BAD GRAMMAR FF 20 GG LUX MID SO BAD
-Ethan

It's been quite a while since I saw any new maple fics, let alone one that has quite an interesting plot to begin with. I really do hope you plan on continuing! ouo

It's been quite a while since I last saw any new maple fics, Let alone one with a rather interesting story. I really do hope you plan to continue!

Wow, I am surprised.
Mēpuru no Sekai is basically just Maple World in Japanese (although Meipuru sounds more like Maple if said out loud). I am not criticizing your choice of names. This definitely rouses my interest.

Cut and paste? The Latin thing is creeping me out.

Um, not sure what you are trying to say with your Latin so I'm going to assume you are not a Latin scholar of any sort? I'm not well versed in Latin either, but I could take a crack at translating your lines from English to Latin if you'd like. Sorry if I'm mistaken though, since seeing Latin in stories makes me very excited for some reason.

The prologue is fine for a beginner. Most of your sentences refer to the heroes as a whole (i.e. "The heroes stood there..." "They started to connect..." "All of their eyes...") which makes the whole thing feel rather disorganized and vague. You might want to focus on one or two characters instead, using sentences such as "Freud's eye widened..." or "Phantom stood there...".