Long after you finished this and no idea if you’ll ever read this but.. “describing the taste by a smell” is a bad comparison. A very big part of taste IS smell. Don’t believe me, read about people losing their smell after Covid. A better description would be “describe taste by a picture” (of the food).

Just a casual note. Good reading so far!

seeing the face of Fleur or Gabrielle while they were right in the middle of... well, in the middle of something she really didn't want to see either of them doing.

No! Incest?!

He's not wrong about that, boys are simple creatures compared to the complex insanity that is girls.

Where's Rita Skeeter? Her outing them seems inevitable, but I haven't seen her at all so far.

This fic is so good. There's a bit more "down with the patriarchy" energy than I generally like, but it's so well done I can't help but like it anyways. Probably helps that unlike irl first world feminism, the almost feudal wizarding world being a bit more patriarchal than the muggle world makes sense. We still have plenty such cultures outside the first world irl after all. Worst culprits are theocracies like just about any muslim country.

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lol. omg I laughed so hard with all the acronyms.

You suck at writing emotional conflict and resolution. just thought you should know.

love your story it was great and well written

I absolutely love She-Who-Knits making and leaving hats out for the elves! XD

Dobby's inclusion in this is my favorite so far, and their hug at the end is beyond heartwarming. :D

In case you didn't already know, I think you meant the breakout happened between First and Second year.

I liked a lot in this. Neville stepping up, and being a useful friend. Getting a bit of a peek inside Dumbledore's mind, and seeing some of Viktor and Fleur. I was surprised to see Ron but it was pretty fun.

This was a great chapter, and learning about societies views was pretty crushing, but at least there's some hope, with Jasmine's money and name. It was nice to learn about McGonagall, and I'm glad she's supporting them now.

The last part, with Jasmine reflecting on her past, did get a bit confusing. Specifically when it came to Hermione. The logic was a bit hard to follow. She wasn't scared, but she was afraid, then there were the two choices she had...

I think I got lost when Jasmine said Hermione chose to risk their friendship to save her, but she still chose the option which was being a "bad friend" in order to preserve it. I get that you were trying to give Hermione a reason to feel bad, and to spotlight the sacrifice she was making to protect Jasmine, but the choice feels needlessly complicated. Especially since Hermione did warn the broom could be cursed and recommended it be turned over (though not sure if your version is different in that regard).

I think Hermione having hesitated in reporting the broom for fear of losing her friends would have been enough, and it would have kept focus on Hermione's sacrifice. Could just be me as well. I reread the section trying to sort out the logic. :P

I still enjoyed that scene, and I'm glad that Jasmine is growing, and will return that support to Hermione. I feel a lot of stories end up with Harry getting all the support (usually because they're the one everyone is trying to kill), so it's nice to see things going both ways. :)

Over 300K words? Now this is more like it! XD

I'm glad it picks up where the last story left off, and I'm liking the dive into McGonagall. I never realized how passive she was in the books. I forgot about her most of the time, to be honest. Should be an interesting meeting to have.

The soul bond is new to me. I'm pretty new to HP fics in general, and this is my first Female Harry story ever, so I'm glad you explained it in your notes.

I enjoyed your fic sooooooo MUCH! THANK YOU FOR PENNING!

i love it!