oh god, this harry is cringe and pathetic as f*ck...

An absolutely amazing fanfic !

whj it s

Dear Penthouse Letters, I never thought I would have a reason to write a letter like this, but at the Yule Ball something happened .. something wonderful .. and then *it got better*...

Are you going to eventually come back and complete this? I really wanna see Harry’s duel.

superb!

てたがちえとばらがたげてねせあえうえおおらめののいっしゅんできみだとわっかたひきよせられたよからだのがいうまたさがしていたのわきみだとこのであいわほていしききこえてくるうちゅのせつりきみわぼくなさだめとゆめさいつでも

haven't looked at the story yet but just the synopsis makes me wish you would finish the story.

Certainly very erotic. It’s very well written, descriptive, and SO erotic. Honestly, I say this would make an amazing porn vid. Taking into consideration the fact that both Fleur and Gabrielle are part Veela, that would just make them even more hot in real life. Now, I can’t say that Cleménce Poésy, the girl who played Fleur in the Harry Potter movies, was all that hot, but the Fleur in the book was supposed to be completely gorgeous. I’m a HUGE Harry Potter fan, (and also a huge sex fan!) so this fanfic was perfect for me. I’m an unprofessional author, so I can recognize a well-written book or article (or just about any other written thing) when I see one, and this is no exception. All I can say is, way to go!

Nice Sex. So fun. The brest and pussy brilliant.

Please continue this story!
It is quite good , both on the lemon and story front
It is quite impressive

Good

You never had him unzip and pull out his dick in the first chapter

Really needs some editing, lots of sloppy sentences.

The hentai logic you’ve got going on with the story is cool but it’s kinda dumb how Harry is suddenly Chad and knows multiple spells out of nowhere for the comfort of the story but it’s a fun fic anyways, you should’ve just skipped to lemons immediately imo, no need for him doing things that don’t make sense