When is Shiori going to fight back!
All this shyness is started to get annoying.

Reminds me to much of Hinata and her stuttering& her own shyness.

At first it's cute but after a while it gets annoying.

I want Shiori to kick some ass!

Great chapter! But I really want to see Shiori beat the crap out of these punks!

Whoa...That was a pretty interesting chapter. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE! :D

Nischela just kissed Shiori...? YURI! :D (Just kidding, since I'm becoming a Yaoi fan. I was thinking about Haruhi kissing Kanako, except Shiori wasn't pushed into by a clumsy idiot prince.)
AND THAT KITTEN'S SO CUTE! I LOVE VANORA ALREADY! :3

I really love your story- a couple things though we're kinda off. Those things were that where luffy, sabo, and ace lived was in the west blue not the grand line but you know- doesn't have to stick to story- but one things that works me the most- shiori is way too week. I mean she was suppose to be training for a long time with whitey and yet she can't even beat alvidia? Luffy did it no problem x.x idk I just feel she is really weak :/

I don't trust Nischela...and I think the secret agency has something to do with a certain Warlord who ate the sand-sand fruit? hmmm?

Wow! 20 chappies in! And This is a nightmare! Not the chapter but the conditions of Alvida and her crew(seriously I hate that French prick even before his laughter...) That other girl though, I'm curious about her... Still if I hope Shiori will get out of this and save the slaves if she can. No child or family or anyone should suffer this way. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter! :)

nice chapter! just a tad bit depressing right now...

Thanks for the update!

Ooohhhhh! I know who the guy in the dream is! hint: he has freckles! LOL I loved this chapter...!

Wow...Shiori has come a long way...She would've been scared out of her wits. Now she's prisoner to Alvida.
Wait, she still has the shirt made out of the blanket Ace gave her? I don't know if Alvida will take it, but if she does, that will definitely push Shiori to the edge.

YAY! An update! It feels like I've been waiting forever for this. Hahaha! I really enjoyed this. Can't wait for the next! :D

Yeah! I like the 'rough and tough' Shiori!

Whoa...Go Shio!
Glad to see another chapter. And I love the mentioning of "The Black Spot".

This is truly an unique fanfic. I love the character design for Shiori, with all of her flaws and her wonderfully tragic back story. The way the characters develop are also very believable and attention grabbing. I love this story and am horribly excited for the next chapter :)