Great story

Amazing story!

Hell yes

Reading chapter 13. Note at the bottom suggests that it's been edited to make Weiss seem less racist. One problem, though, is that none of the reactions seem edited. Everyone reacts as if she was super racist, and Blake in specific claims Weiss has said things she never did. The whole thing reads as "Weiss, bad, Blake good, or Faunus good, people who don't like White Fang bad" when no matter your stance on, Blake is actively defending organisation who she admits (in this story and canonicallywant to kill all humans, while Weiss brings up that that's not good, and that she met a lot of bad faunus too (That's after Blake and Yang pretending that she accused the entirety of faunus race of being genocidal maniacs). All faults Weiss had raised were with Faunus who happened to be in the White Fang. As she herself stated, she had no problem with non-WF faunus like Velvet. One Party is defending a group performing (with goals of) racial genocide, the other is not. What then turns weird is the party that is anti-genocide gets blamed by others. Something that wasn't a thing in canon.

The rest of the story is great (as much as I read it), but this entire chapter was horrid.

Reading chapter 13. Note at the bottom suggests that it's been edited to make Weiss seem less racist. One problem, though, is that none of the reactions seem edited. Everyone reacts as if she was super racist, and Blake in specific claims Weiss has said things she never did. The whole thing reads as "Weiss, bad, Blake good, or Faunus good, people who don't like White Fang bad" when no matter your stance on, Blake is actively defending organisation who she admits (in this story and canonicallywant to kill all humans, while Weiss brings up that that's not good, and that she met a lot of bad faunus too (That's after Blake and Yang pretending that she accused the entirety of faunus race of being genocidal maniacs). All faults Weiss had raised were with Faunus who happened to be in the White Fang. As she herself stated, she had no problem with non-WF faunus like Velvet. One Party is defending a group performing (with goals of) racial genocide, the other is not. What then turns weird is the party that is anti-genocide gets blamed by others. Something that wasn't a thing in canon.

The rest of the story is great (as much as I read it), but this entire chapter was horrid.

Sigma Male Roman

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A very satisfying read.

I love this.

Roman vs Cinder? Count me in.

Oh god not another crazy kid trying to trash the club!

Is the Roman in this fanfics universe actually that racist/speciesist or is he just like that to piss people off?

Things were certainly better on Remnant before all the stupid settled in at the end of V3 and this fanfiction here is proof of it. I like this whole thing and approve of its existence.

I'm giving you an 8/10 and those whole 2 points are gone cos you dun goofed with Neo, author. Would've gotten full marks if not for that.

Lastly, thank fuck Jaune's name didn't come up at all. If nobody ever writes another RWBY fanfiction starring some sort of badass OC donut steel coincidentally named Jaune, it'll still be too many.

Neat idea here. Shame the story is kinda finished so it won't amount to anything much. Would be neat to see this going down but it certainly wouldn't fit with the Romancentric nature of this thing.

Neo can't talk. You have commited a grave sin here, author. Your previous greatness at writing her is now completely erased.