|Reviews for War never changes|
| ChocolateTeapot chapter 1 . 5/24/2015
Good work! It is pretty well written and I liked the various perspectives. I liked that you chose characters with quite different views from each other. That gave the story a certain range and made it interesting. I'd have liked it if they had been a little longer.
I think it would be a good idea to include paragraphs within the sections (and use a different method to denote section breaks). In particular, it's typical to start a new paragraph whenever a different person starts speaking, as that makes dialogue much easier to follow. However, all the sections are short enough that the lack of paragraphs makes doesn't them hard to read.
The alarming detachment of the machine gunner was the most interesting part. But I liked the stuff from the perspective of the civilians as well and Ramesses' rather blasé reaction to war breaking out was interesting too.