|Reviews for Synchronicity part 2|
| Vee017 chapter 1 . 12/28/2002
Nice fic, but it didn't really seem like a POV.
when writing fiction you should really stay away from trying to include the reader into the story by using terms like "you feel YOUR...", "Flood YOUR mind" When people are going through something like Willow did do they really think like that? POV's use "my", "I", and references to themselves it's through their eyes.
And your summery for this makes it seem like Willow's account of things for the entire episode of "Seeing Red".
You'd probably get more reviews for this story if you let annonymous reviewers review your story, because you have it set so that only people who are logged in, can review. Just in case you were unaware of that.