Reviews for Cost
DjinniFires chapter 1 . 8/8/2015
I have no clue what this fandom is. That being said, love the line "One was an acquaintance and the other was the bane of his existence." That's an unexpected pair of opposites. The image "the first straw" is cute, but perhaps carry it through in the sentence, i.e., "It was the first straw in a long series of straws." The last line is good because you add the "or so they say" that takes the line out of the realm of authorial statements and makes it a sad self-reflection by the character.

One nit: in the last paragraph, just "it was Penny" not "it was the Penny."