Reviews for RWBY'S Book: Armored Kitty
hakon2feb chapter 17 . 9/10
Hi.
Firstly, i would say i enjoyed the story. It had some fun points, and that's a big part of what i look for in stories.
However, i felt you could have put more into Jaune's development. Jaune going from *Could probably kill 4-5 grimm alone* to *27 grimm dead around him* in an instant, and then nothing for the rest of the story. The whole point of Jaune going out there to kill those grimm was to prove that he belonged at Beacon, yet the feat didn't seem to boost his confidence at all for the rest of the story (I would also like to point out that it's unlikely that Jaune's new semblance would enable him to be that much better so fast, as i would think you'd need to train with your semblance before becoming any good with it (Pyrrha's semblance doesn't do shit to grimm, so who says Jaune's semblance is any different?)).
I know this was just supposed to be a fun short story, but i felt you lost out on a lot of character building by having Blake cry half the time, Pyrrha being a sudden tsundere rage monster and Jaune's family first acting so accepting then so demanding at the flip of a switch.

hakon2feb.
scottusa1 chapter 17 . 12/25/2016
What a fun little story. Thanks for writing this.
Have a good one. Laters.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 11 . 11/24/2016
Great chapter. Loving all the character interaction and development. The pacing and dialogue are spot on. Seems the sisters are divided on loving Blake. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 10 . 11/24/2016
One of the more complex and dynamic chapters
Jaune sisters were well written and felt like individual characters.
Good dialogue and pacing. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 9 . 11/24/2016
The Arc sisters are adorable
Blake was cute also. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 8 . 11/24/2016
Really good chapter. Well written. Blake having no one was incredibly sad. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 7 . 11/24/2016
Fantastic chapter. Blake adorable as ever. Jaune hopefully learns from this near death experience. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 6 . 11/24/2016
This was a fantastic chapter. Great pacing, humour and dialogue. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 5 . 11/24/2016
Fantastic chapter. They are starting slowly buy they make an adorable couple. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 4 . 11/24/2016
I just wish it worked on mobile.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 3 . 11/24/2016
Fantastic chapter. Blake was adorable. Yang better not mess this up. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 2 . 11/24/2016
Great chapter. Jealous Blake is adorable. Jaune did what was right. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
cybercorpsesnake chapter 1 . 11/24/2016
Great chapter to start the story on. Good use of emotions. Looking forward to next chapter. Keep up the good work.
Batpool chapter 17 . 11/11/2016
I honestly LOVE your style of writing! The anime-ish way its written is actually really fun to imagine while reading. In fact, I could actually see this being animated or something. Keep up the good work!
thejoker888 chapter 17 . 6/13/2016
Noooooo nooooo I liked the first onr
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