|Reviews for Moria|
| videl-z chapter 1 . 8/14/2003
Oh... pretty lights... Huh? Oh! RIGHT! REVIEW! I can't believe I never reviewed this one! well, as you might expect, I hate you. you evil, better-at-poem-writing person you! anyways, it's good. Third verse, third line, 'it presence brought' 'it' own the presence, so you should put its. There's still the same number of syllables, and you use proper grammar. of course, i didn't capitalize half the things i should have in thise review, so... anyways bye! I hope you're having fun backpacking...
OH! RIGHT!you do know who this is, right?
Of course you do! bye!
| Frodo Liv3s chapter 1 . 2/20/2003
| Brenron chapter 1 . 12/26/2002
| Stardust Flare chapter 1 . 12/25/2002
Hey cool poem (I like how it also rhymes _). The only thing you might wanna change is the 1st line of the last stanza...for some reason, it seems too long and it breaks the "flow/beat" of the poem. O_o um, I hope I explained myself in a comprehendable way...
Anyways, keep writing! :)