This story has a lot of potential. I hope this does great and continue until the end!

I don't even play Mass Effect and I really like your story. I would very much like to know what happens next in Tola's life. It's been a long time since you updated, but I've enjoyed this so far, so on going to put an update alert on it and hope you haven't abandoned.

great story hope to see it continue, wish you good luck with the idea )

"-All Krogan suffer from the permanent de-buff The Genophage: reduces the ability to reproduce with other Krogan by 1000%"

You got your percent wrong. Unless I'm mis-remembering, the Genophage results in only one in one thousand Krogan not being stillborn.

Depending on how you interprete the phrase "reduces ... by ...%", you either said that there is only one success for every 10 attempts (100% * 10 1000%) or that no krogans are born because every fetus dies 10 times over.

To be less confusing, I'd suggest using one of these phrasings instead:

"-All Krogan suffer from the permanent de-buff The Genophage: induces a stillbirth rate of 99.9%"

"-All Krogan suffer from the permanent de-buff The Genophage: reduces the odds of a successful birth to 0.01%"

(Note the "reduces to" instead of "reduces by")

...or, since we're talking about one in a thousand and "percent" is from the latin for "per hundred" ("5 cents" "5 hundredths of a dollar", "century" hundred years), we could just say "per thousand" (See also "per mille")

"All Krogan suffer from the permanent de-buff The Genophage: induces a stillbirth rate of 999 per thousand."

Pretty cool story! I'm a bit disappointed Tola didn't put at least one point into biotics, but he's pretty awesome anyway. :) Hope you continue the story sometime and we get to see the fallout from his adventure.

This is incredibly interesting, please do anything you can to continue it

looking forward to reading more of this

Please please please let this be updated soon I wanna know what happens next

I love everything about this fic please keep the updates coming! XD

This was a good chapter, I liked the action. I have one question though, doesn't he have an [Inventory] where he could have put the weapons and just say he left them behind? it said in the beginning that he had an [inventory] so that confused me as to why he doesn't use it.

Well I hope you are eventually going to update this story as your last update was in August and its now November. Anyways its a good story and I do appreciate you coming up with this as it has kept me somewhat entertained.

Nice fanfic

Love the story
are you gonna equip Tola with portable turrets?

Methinks Gilo is in for some pain.

Love it, I sincerely hope you continue this