All this years later, and this one still gives me a heavy heart. Whenever you are, Cynd, thanks for writing this. Crazy to think it started almost 10 years ago.

God this Omake, this story in general hits so much harder all these years later as an adult. I'm not crying, you're crying.

Man this story is heartwarming. I love how Cardin gets redeemed as strong-man giga chad. He's a real bro now that his heart is in the right place.

This is my third time reading this, but its been years. I'm older now, and the heartwarming aspects of this hit harder than they did then. An absolute blast. Love this story.

Hard to put all my feelings about this story into one review. I'm not so great at talking about the good things so this might just be all my negative opinions about this. You started this story really strong with characters i enjoyed reading and keeping me invested in how everything would all fall out. But it was how and perhaps when things unfolded that waned my enthusiasm slowly. The last 10-20 chapters? ive been mostly skimming because of the disappointment. The pacing is only one problem but its pretty big. after noirs introduction we had a few chapters of slow downtime until it was pedal to the metal towards the end without any care for how the smaller branches of this story ended or grew. Another peeve of mine is how you handled death in this story. I'm not sure i was satisfied by any of the death scenes in this story. For the most part you seemed to just kill characters off screen. When it did happen on screen it was brief or ruined by the perspective you chose. Weiss' death didn't feel like anything at all at that point, just another casualty to the brevity you chose to keep to when writing death. I'm pretty sure i saw a review talking about how the canon characters really fell short compared to your OCs and on that I really agree. Not even touching combat at the moment, I never felt like the canon characters shined excluding maybe Yatsu and Glynda. Yes you have a big cast and i can understand not everyone can have some kind of plot linked conflict that really shows who they are or why we like them despite their faults. But neglecting your canon characters so we can try and sympathize with your OCs isn't fun. Another frustration of mine I'll mention briefly is how shoehorned the Fae everything felt and of course the teaser? of the canon plot involving Salem and Cinder. From what I read of your notes canon was doing their own thing while you were writing this and you were doing your best to include that in your story. My opinion is that you should've scrapped Salem and all of the implications it brought. It never made sense for her to just sit in the background during this story. On the fae, well none of it felt like it was something you had planned out. It was never something i could have imagined at the beginning of the story and not in a good way. Finally I'll end on the sisters/swords and how frustrating it felt for you to try and reason what was basically rule of cool. Almost all of the large/terrifying feats performed were seemingly just based on misunderstanding their abilities and then we were just supposed to accept that everything we knew about them was wrong. This happened multiple times and sometimes with the same character. SO many times I read whatever new abilty or application of power and instantly thought then why did this happen or why did this character NOT do this instead? Just talking about this made me spiral into another bout of useless thought and frustration. I'm not sure when it happened but at some point i stopped feeling like the swords were terrifying forces of nature and just an annoying plot device. I'd try and talk about what i liked but it's a bit hard right now to separate those things from what i disliked.

Not a fan of how brutally well known characters are getting stomped and unalived in this. Especially our badass blind brawler fox

This was absolutely, positively, flipping fantastic! I can only congratulate you on writing such a banger of a story! Thank you for writing, and I hope to see more awesome stuff from you!

I don’t know why, but every time I get to a fight scene with Jaune in this fic I imagine his eyes glowing a bright white/blue.

Im pretty sure this was written before we found out about saffron?

Shunsui Kyoraku's shikai attacks based off children's games, while Jushiro Ukitake is the one who absorbs attacks and then sends them back.

Violet is a great sister. Not like my brother. Bullied me both in game and RL

the misspelling of dojo as dogo still bothers me

rofl

so much bullshit

You do realize that you are showing the perfect way to make an introvert become even more antisocial?