I've been reading and re-reading the Inheritance Cycle for years. I'm currently going through them again as I write this in march of 2016, and I have to say: You are a very gifted author! I was homeschooled so I spent 90% of my childhood reading books of all genres, but with a special emphasis on fantasy such as the time period portrayed in "Eragon". You are doing a marvelous job of emulating the style of Christopher Paolini while staying true to who you are as an author. I am very impressed with this text you have produced.

I am quite in awe of your project (as a mother of 3 myself, I can't even imagine where you found the time!) Coming from a sexsin solid Catholic upbringing, it has twisted my brain around to see lemons as an expression of spirituality. So despite my objections about OOC issues I am continuing to read. Nice work.

Ahhh I think I got it here, the trouble part is Willow loves Eragon and then she will get jealous, causing a bit of drama I assume. Smart.

I feel as if the love has moved to fast, it should have been slowed, they enjoy each other's company and both love adventure, and within the books that had "moments" I feel like their should have been a bigger plot of action and adventure, but only with Eragon and Arya's relationship more prominent because they both love each other. The love words as "darling" and "my love" are OOC for both characters. I haven't read your next book or "part" but for my own fan fiction, I used the fact that the races all tried to win over the dragon riders of their kin and project their power and might, resulting in a mega war. Your book is still good and I still enjoy reading it but if the moments and pace were slower and their was also a bigger problem to worry about to it would've made their story more interesting, the reason the Arya-Eragon story was so interesting was because of the difficulty with it ever happening and the fact the must focus on toppling Galbatorix first

Nice writing & plot...onward.

Santiqua

Utterly fantastic! At every single flirt that Arya had made, it all felt so strange that she was so indelicate during the original series. I like this new change, as it finally puts pieces together in my mind, and I'm RELIEVED in a way that she and Eragon are bonded at last. Probably the best Fanfiction I've read.
Cheers!
-SpellbindingTadpol

Having just reread the series and desperately needing a continuation whilst I wait for more news regarding Book 5, your story appealed to me. As an avid fan of Paolini, I thought of several pros and cons to your story so far.

Pros: Eloquently written, good pacing in the later chapters. Willow and Varhog's love story is adorable. The descriptions of the characters and eggs and such is amazing. "Lemony" parts are satisfyingly steamy without getting trashy. You really do have a talent for writing. This was an enormous, impressive project, and you should definitely be proud of it. I'd be interested in reading something entirely original from you, perhaps on Fiction Press?

Cons: I know other reviewers have mentioned it, but I feel it is necessary to point out: Paolini's characters are incredibly OOC, especially Arya. While I'm certain she would have a solid knowledge regarding female anatomy, I am absolute positive she would require a lot more convincing than just becoming pregnant to make her believe in a higher power. As another reviewer pointed out, neither she nor Eragon would immediately abandon all formality upon their reunification... He'd be too uncertain, and she's Arya, enough said. I'm not so troubled by Murtagh, as it has been ten years and his personality changes were nowhere near as stark as E & A, though I think it would have taken him longer to join Eragon on the Isle. Angela is a tough personality to recreate, and I feel as though a few more of her verbal oddities could have improved her immensely.
I can't help but feel that a lot of your own personal views regarding gender roles, higher powers, and perhaps even conception definitely influenced your writing in a noticeable way. Part of what I loved about Paolini was that it was nearly impossible to figure out where he stood on most issues, such as religion, through his story. So for me personally, I'd have to list that as a con, because it is affecting the way characters are behaving in ways that it shouldn't.

Hello,

I don't know if you'll see this, but if you do I want you to know that while I wouldn't have originally pictured Arya this way your explanation in the A/N helps me see what you mean and I don't find it too difficult to believe (I'll keep it in mind next time I reread the books). I also want you to know that while your bio which led me hear said you weren't a writer I think your writing is eloquent (especially compared to many other fanfictions I've attempted to read).

I look forward to continuing your story :)

-Mary

at first i liked what you were doing with the characters and how you handled their reunion, but after a certain point i have to disagree with you on a few things. 1) i mentioned in a previous comment about how you included details that allude to very rigid gender roles. you continued to do so, and that's not really my cup of tea. i get that Eragon would want to protect Arya, since she is someone he loves; but you didn't mention once that Arya is perfectly capable, and perhaps wanting to, protect Eragon right back. 2) you effectively regressed most of Arya's superior skill over Eragon in matters of wisdom drawn from extensive life experiences, in swordcraft, in magical knowledge, etc. i understand that eragon has learned a ton from the eldunari but that doesn't discount what arya has to bring to the table. eragon doesn't have to be the "teacher" or be "more" knowledgeable just because that aligns with the notion of what a man does in a relationship. 3) i thought it was nice that you used details about arya's fascination with children from the original series to justify her wanting a child, but you completely ignored that she had just entered a new relationship, and hadn't given any indication whatsoever that she was ready to have and raise one; it was sufficient that she had always "dreamed about it." and what was that about? suddenly arya doesn't want anything but a child and she is relegated to the trope that All Women Want Kids?
perhaps it's because i read those books from a different perspective than you and so i interpreted the characters differently than you. nonetheless, i'm glad you loved writing this and i hope you continue to do what you love!

i love this story and how you're taking the time to show the way the relationship between arya and eragon expands, but the gender roles you've portrayed in subtle ways seem a bit rigid to me. for example, she made his ring more manly by dimming the gemstone? what?! a gemstone is literally a rock that's refined and cut to precision. i understand that in the real world, that perception is widespread but this is fiction. gender roles don't have to be so hard. i'm not sure if i explained myself clearly enough, but anyway-i love the story's pacing so far!

I loved this story! It is a realy great interpretation of what happens after the books! Good job I'm very impressed!

This is a fanastatic story! I always wanted Eragon and Arya to be together.

Ok. This was well written I give it that. I understand that relationships progress and people change, mature, and etc just Eragon frustrated me! He just stood out as a Mary Sue. I couldn't help think he was too skilled and too wise. I understand he had the Eldunari to give him life experiences, wisdom and blah blah blah, but I thought he doesn't have the maturity to understand all that they share with him. Also I get the coping by throwing oneself into work etc. but that to me doesn't make Eragon any less of a Mary Sue in how he is perfect. I get that Arya would see the maturation that Eragon has gone through in the 10 years they were apart, and I thought that was exaggerated by the love she finally admitted to harboring for him.

I did like Willow and Varhog. Their dynamic was not refreshing but a foil to Eragon and Arya's relationship. They seem a bit Mary Sue-esque but I could tolerate it. Definitely excited to see where you take Murtagh and Nasauda! Don't stop writing.

-Bob the Story Builder

Arya doesn't feel like Arya in this story.