|Reviews for Legion|
| pixelherodev chapter 7 . 4/15
"All changes are for my entertainment."
If this *entertains* you, then you are a sick, twisted person.
No offense or anything.
| Guest chapter 24 . 4/12
Over a year. Still a fun story to read, but it feels like the story has been abandoned. Hopefully abandoned instead of the alternative...
Good luck, author. Wherever you are.
| Spartan3909 chapter 24 . 4/9
Thanks for the chapter _.
| Soul D Phoenix chapter 24 . 3/24
Great story, hope you start updating again soon!
| Anderaith chapter 20 . 2/26
| Navn Ukjent chapter 24 . 2/21
Nice fic so far.
I do hope to see more soon.
| Guest chapter 24 . 2/12
Fantastic job, update soon please!
PS: I love your work
| Guest chapter 10 . 2/12
Jesus this gets really sappy at times...I need more!
| Valdimarian chapter 22 . 2/5
So I've been reading through the story, and it's absolutely fantastic, but one thing jumped out at me this chapter.
Taylor had to go get new jeans and tee-shirts, but did she ever get a new bathing suit? If she'd tried to change into it I suspect she'd have been quite embarrassed with how little it covered.
| Crownworthy chapter 24 . 1/27
I will freely admit that this story is a guilty pleasure of mine, and that I enjoyed reading it somewhat. However, there are several problems that need to be addressed before I would consider calling it good.
Apart from the ridiculous overpowering of Taylor and Amy, my biggest problem with this story is the character development. As other reviewers have pointed out, this especially goes for the hospital scene in chapter six. Even though you handwaved it away with some fanon about compatible powers, their interaction felt really rushed, as did their openness with each other.
The dialogue in this story is often rather stiff. People don’t usually explain why they are doing what they are doing by saying stuff like “As you were there for me before, so I shall be here for you now.” And just putting it after the dialogue instead doesn’t make it any better. “I’m here for you.”, I said, trying to explain that I was there for her. That sounds a bit redundant.
Despite these problems, I still enjoyed reading your story on a fundamental level, and hope you haven’t abandoned it.
| Crownworthy chapter 17 . 1/24
You realize that Othala is affiliated with Empire 88, right? I doubt their collaboration would have gone this smoothly.
| dan chapter 24 . 1/22
| FreeAllFrogs chapter 24 . 1/17
Every now and then I need to reread this fine story. Thanks for your time and effort.
| one.who.reads chapter 10 . 1/9
I like your premise and plot enough that I got through chapters one through ten, but I'm going to have to stop reading this story. I think you are having the characters internal monologues be far too detailed and its like things always immediately click into place with no confusion or missed guesses. Also, no-one in my experience promptly exposits their insights like this.
I feel like your characters oversharing is bogging down your plot progression.
| Jonn Wolfe chapter 24 . 12/18/2017
This is an awesome piece of fanfuc! Love it, and love the Taylor/Amy dynamic. Hoping this picks back up.