Hello author, i am a very new reader on this story, chapter 6 more exactly, and the mc said he would prevent the age of dark (wich from what i know of the lore would restore balance to the world and break the forcefull cicle created by Gwyn).
i would like to know if he still thinks that this is the way to save the world, bacause if he does then he'll just be Gwyn 2.0 and i dont want to read that.
If you could answer i would be very gratefull.

Over all I'd give the latest chapter a 6 or maybe 7 out of 10. The main grievance being that repetition of "I'm freezing", at the start. It does well to convey to the readers just how much of a personal Hell Void kaylen is going through. The cold, the confusion, pain, suffering and dieing in Precillas shadow realm. But the amount of repetition that was used definitely felt like it was too much. If you plan on using a similar sequence in the future, I'd suggest reducing the amount of repetitions in those loops.
In regards to the consequences of this endless loop of suffering and death, I'm not sure how you're gonna do it though. Because Void Kaylen doesn't really feel all that connected to real space Kaylen at least emotionally and mentally. The story thus far has kind of conveyed that the two are separate in those categories, so the standard already been set as such, unless you add something to the story that makes it clear that the 2 are more deeply connectedqnd can feel wach others pain.
As for other possible consequences, Void Kaylen could literally go numb or "Mind broken" from the near endless death and suffering, to the point he no longer even cares or reacts, essentially becoming a husk, an empty shell. too the point that even Void Priscilla takes notice and stops killing him, to find out why he isn't even reacting.
Though the thing with Kaylens body changing to become better "Prey", stronger prey makes a lot of sense so good on that idea.
Anyhow, im looking forward to the next chapter

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I've got to hand it to you. This is somehow better then the last time. No, really, it's streamlined and a lot less chaotic then last time, but that somehow managed to make it a nicer read.
The way you handled Anastacia in this was also really superb. The trope of having the weakest character be the centre of attention and in this case, be the voice of reason. It's a great choice and it really shows of her characters personality, good job with that.
Granted, I am saddened by the fact we lost that pretty spicy confession from Priscilla that had everybody eyes wide.(ps, if that happened in the previous chapter and not the one that was replaced, then disregard that last statement).
So overall, it was really good. The more relaxed style of writing for these kinds of chapters feels well suited, while the chaotic style feels more suited to Action and actual chaotic scenes, like when everything was being destroyed.

Pss. Since we've basically established that Gwyndolin is a Broken and battered Femboy, im wondering, if after Kaylen defeats him and probably gives him some convincing hero speech that makes him join up, Gwyndolin somehow develops an interest in him, that the ladies notice pretty quickly, but the profits completely Dense to it. Just sayin, the mind likes to wonder.

Good work! I don't think it needs rewriting, if you really want to start it anew at least finish this one first and do it after, it is quite a good story.

thanks i love this fic

when the Dragon showed up it was really hyped!
But until you named it I could really not tell if it was Kalameet or Midir.

Hope Hawkeye Gough turns up!
Seems like it is time.

Hope He looses the helmet and spears Manus!

Man things are getting super chaotic now again. If I was there I would really want to shout out "COME ON, REALLY!". One thing after another, our dude could really use a nap now.

Really liked the scene where the girls throw in their thoughts after Kaylen talks about all he is dealing with right now. Loved how Anastasia started the whole thing and showed she is more then the nice gentle girl who wouldn't even hurt a fly. Was definitely surprised how close Anastasia and Velka have become. Kaylen better watch out, I imagine he will be probably be outnumbered in any future martial arguments lol. Hope Kaylen has a bit of an M side in him because I feel like some couple activities will be very rough when it comes to Priscilla after that confession of hers lol. Loved everyone's reaction to that too lol. To be frank they did ask for it.

Loved how Kaylen got Priscilla to calm down lol. That is certainly a fun way to get someone's attention.

In hindsight I shouldn't be but was still surprised by Yuria's response to when Kayleen calls her a psychopath. Dude, she really far gone huh.

Overall I think the conversation on what to do with Priscilla was done pretty good. Sure things could have been more confrontational but fact is those in charge of the different factions were or are close friends. Even knowing the consequences none were eager to actually throw hands. I think Solaires response to solve it felt in character lol. Can't argue that Oscar has a point in death would be better then whatever Priscilla will do if she goes out of control. But honestly if we wanted to do the smart thing we wouldn't be here now. World has literally been against us in getting everyone a happy ending from the very beginning. I say we keep going and save the fluffy dragon waifu. Dark Souls is all about facing seemingly impossible challenges, overcoming them, and enjoying the bliss of success afterwards. Giving up now would be like saying enduring all the pain to now was pointless. I say lets keep going until we reach an ending we can be happy with! One we can spend in bliss with the waifus!

About your worries on Seth, I will admit halfway through the chapter I was thinking to myself where he was. I expected him to turn up when the other baddies did but seems he is missing the party.

I also admit to being surprised when Gywndolin started to talk since it felt everyone had forgotten him at that point. Felt bad for him, Yurias insults did not help.

All this Ant-life talk makes me think darkseid is gonna show up

i do not know why, but i fell like Oscar is dead once quelaan and quelaag get their hands hands on him. to be frank, i dont feel sorry for him, he did leave his wifes high and dry after all and retribution is all over the table.

your making one hell of a great story and i cant wait till you come around to post again on the next one, i understand it takes time, but maybe not take forever again, maybe

(ch 14) I learned recently, that a lemon isn't naturally occurring, and is instead a crossbreed between an orange and a citron! which means, LIFE NEVER GAVE US LEMONS, WE INVENTED THEM ALL BY OURSELVES!

Chaos is also life, through will, emotion and intent, it can be guided not controlled,

I am writing through a translator
Firstly, now I have a feeling that we have moved, so to speak, to Dark Souls 2. And therefore, if I’m right with this, then we can expect the appearance of the Ivory King (the True GIGAChad in all of DS).
Secondly, why Aldia never appeared, he somehow exists outside of the Primordial Flame and Darkness/Abyss. At the very least, he should have been interested in the Protagonist.
Thirdly, for me alone, from the description of the image of the Chaotic Dragon Oscar, for some reason the image of the Old Iron King is drawn (I wouldn’t be surprised if the image of Oscar’s new form was inspired by him)
P.S. something too many Dark Souls 2

You know, seeing how powerful Oscar's become, it puts into perspective just how parallel he is to Kaylen. He's put himself at more or less the same level as Kaylen, but I still don't see him beating Priscilla. Fighting?, yes. Winning?, nah.
That whole chapter was just chaos incarnate. The way Oscar was just being thrown around like a Ragdoll and his mind doing the same, all up until the moment he decided he had enough.
I don't think he'll ever get to place responsibility on Priscilla, she'll probably acknowledge that what she's done was horrible and she will regret it, yes, but what is there to be done about it? He can't kill her or Velka, Kaylen and by extension everyone else there wouldn't allow it. So it'll likely be a battle of words between Kaylen and Oscar.
I also enjoyed that interaction at the end Oscar had with the sisters. Their stundere attitude is chefs kiss.
And finally. I'd like to address the allegations that have been laid agants the Author. They are false and greatly exaggerated. Not once while reading did it feel like the woman were treated as objects. And the way the author describes them. Be it normally or Lewdly, is called "Fan service" and everyone does it. So your good on that front.

I thought they were Nito and Aldritch, while I had my doubts with Aldri, it was mostly because it took me awhile to remember what his form was like before he ate Gwyndolin.

Truly Oscar and our prophet walk different paths, but still, I can't help but dislike Oscar but I also sympathize with him, he deviated from his path, entangled himself with the witches, he's being manipulated with them and while he obtained power, his sense of righteousness compels him to kill the prophet (while understandable because of the whole Pryscilla situation, it still leaves a bitter taste but, looking at it carefully, truly there was no other way and there isn't anyone else that can fill that role) so it's respectable and I acknowledge it, you truly did wrote him really well~

So... Are these first two chapters supposed to be scene for scene the same story as the other top story in this category? I've heard of people borrowing ideas, but basically rewording another person's work is a bit distasteful.

-Zetsumei