I have tried to Fix the problems to the best of my Ability but my computer is already with the technician and i have important Family matter to resolve i am using my phone to check on things i realy hope that you all like my story since is the first time i write somenthing since i never used the computer for writing and English is not my first Language so sorry for the mistakes.

Pretty good story so far besides some grammatical errors here and there it was still good. Hope you update soon and can't wait to see how erza reacts to what natsu did with Lucy.

I liked the chapter!

FUCK IT! PROOFREAD THE STUFF BEFORE YOU POST IT!

Punctuation and word format needs a lot work, but I like where this story is heading. Good job mate.

I like it please update soon

I think its great for being your first story and I can't actually wait for the next chapter. So great job and keep up with the good work.
-Relic Dragon

This is much better than you last attempt, especially the second part. you got the date he found the egg wrong but other than that I'm liking the story idea.