interesting.
My bro told me about this fic, So I hope you deliver

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WOAH THERE JACK YOU GOT A WILD ONE!

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HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAH!
Oh, missy you got no clue what you just did.

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SHIT!
JACK RUN!

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Elsa...
More powerful than Jack Frost?
I would call absolute bullshit, utter complete bullshit.
Jack Frost is an immortal spirit of Winter, he has control over the winds, the blizzards, everything.
Perhaps Elsa, canonically, could wield more power than Jack for the moment, but make no mistake, in a battle between the two my money's on Jack.

Wow, just when I think you have written your best, you make me a lier, this new chapter jumps to life, the feelings, the playfulness, the realness of the story all together, please keep writing, I thank you for this wonderful story, I am waiting for you next chapter.

oh god.. wtf does pitch want

Yesss a bit of conflict rising out of the past, I LOVE IT. A /lot/ of kissing in this chapter and it's what we've all been waiting for, and Jack's self control was really admirable. Excellent job, CANNOT WAIT for the next one.

Here he comes... the big bad... the boogeyman... the dark one... the destroyer of dreams... the only... PIIIIIITCH BLAAAAAAAAAAAACK!

ooh the way she blooms under his praise is lovely. shes positively giddy! go away pitch do not ruin this moment!

THAT WAS AMAZING! Thank you so much for this new chapter it made me smile so much in an uncertain time right now.

Also the way I went "NO!" when Pitch showed up!

Thank you so much! You never fail to disappoint in your chapters!

~Mixitupqueen.

Beautiful. Intricate. Deep. Insightful. Thorough.

Once again, wonderfully done. I love all of the details— you went so far as to create names, bookpamphlet titles, dates of publication, and records of interviews as evidence of the research that Elsa did throughout the years. That adds a lot of realism and believability to the story. Marvelously done.

You’ve painted a very dark and tragic, yet beautiful portrait of these two forging a friendship through their experiences and their respective strengths to balance out the other’s weaknesses. I really love and respect Jack’s indignation at how Elsa was treated, and his repeatedly reminding her that her father’s solutions were NOT HELPFUL.

It also really shows the level of trust that Elsa has in Jack at this point, that they are discussing their respective views on society and that she’s showing him something valuablesacred to her that she has carefully hidden from everyone else. I really like reading about their deepening friendship. It is very believable.

I am not exaggerating when I say that this is one of your most profound chapters in this story. Truly, the substance of this chapter and this story so far could easily be a young adult—adult novel or novella, maybe. This is a very deep dive into childhood neglect, mental health, and trauma— none of which could be adequately handled with nuance in a Disney movie. I’m really impressed by this chapter.

I know that the Frozen canon does massive time skips from the girls’ childhood to adolescence to young adulthood, leaving a large amount to fans’ imaginations.

Everything you have imagined here is perfectly believable for Elsa’s character, in my opinion. You have painted an extremely tragic and believable portrait of a neglected child who was taught that she was a danger to herself and society because of her powers over ice and snow— a child so alone and desperate for hope that she latched on to a story about a supposedly mythological being and obsessively researched him, praying that he would show up and help her. And as a guardian of children, this would understandably horrify Jack and turn a lot of his rage against her parents, who essentially committed child neglect in their attempts to “do the right thing and help her” …. which is also tragic in a way because it does seem, from the Frozen canon, that they thought they were doing the right thing for her— when in reality, their methods were hurting her more.

Wow… these two truly are dorks. In the best way possible. I wasn’t sure how to feel initially aboit Jack’s babbling, as it clearly makes Elsa uncomfortable. But I suppose he is head over heels for her and doesn’t have a filter so whatever pops into his head comes out of his mouth… and she is even more discomfited than the average person perhaps would be because of her lonely history and being unused to being subjected to so much… well, romantic adoration.

You have managed to make their respective interests in snow quite reflective of their individual personalities! That’s a very creative take on it. I would never have thought of it that way— Jack enjoys white out blizzards, and Elsa prefers studying individual snowflakes for their intricate patterns. That actually fits quite well. Again, you have taken something that seems to be treated as a taboo reason for their ship and turned it into something quite deepwell thought out.

What a beautiful chapter! The absolute BEST paragraph—which captures the potential of these two to bond over their shared abilities—is the one where Elsa is watching Jack spinning and dancing on the table as he conducts the snow dancing and swirling around him. She even thinks of him as an “angelic, dazzlingly radiant young man” in that moment, which is a simultaneously romantic and classy way of describing someone. Honestly, if anything captured the ethereal beauty of these two artists bonding over their shared powers over icesnow, it was that breathtaking moment.

I will again praise your ability to skillfully and compellingly write ElsaJack’s friendship. The jokes, the playfulness, the mischief—then suddenly, the spur of the moment heart-to-heart conversations. It is written so, so naturally and believably—it’s astounding to me that anyone could foolishly believe that the shipping of these two is “just because they have ice powers.”

No, you have built up and fleshed out their friendship with DEPTH and nuance. They laugh together, tease and play with and mock each other, push each other to new heights, and catch each other when one of them falls. They switch easilybelievably from goofing off one moment to having a deeply emotional conversation the next. Magnificent work on your part.

Minor critique—the word “jolted” is also getting quite overused, so could mix it up with words or phrases like, “Startled, looked askance, taken aback, did a double take,” and so on so forth.