Reviews for Self-Insert feat Taurik |
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![]() ![]() IED like to read more hope you update soon |
![]() ![]() It seems really interesting, and I would love for it to continue (might even do so myself with your permission, seeing as you have neglected it for about 2 years, no offense intended :D). I appreciate your lack of grammar and spelling mistakes and the way it seemed to flow as a story. I would love to have gotten to know your more roommate-level personal version of Taurik and to better understand Treia's character, as well as her situation. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM ALERT: I must say though, I don't think the academy would pair a male and female, of any species, to be roommates. This is because no one can monitor what goes on behind closed doors, and, although it is not really the academy's place to tell them what to do in their free time, it could present the problems of both invasions of privacy and the encouragement of inappropriate actions of a sexual nature, specifically without one member's consent. Not to say that Taurik would do such a thing, but I don't think the academy would allow it anyway. Perhaps editing it to suggest, not only that she has a problem with her roommate being Vulcan (for reasons I did not fully understand. Maybe you should make that a little more clear?), she was accidentally paired with a male, perhaps because of her name being misspelled in their data banks or something like that? One thing I'm curious about: did you have a real conversation with Cleverbot to get those responses? I ask because they were spot on, the way it kind of jumps around subjects (much to my dismay because if I go to talk to it to make me feel better or to calm down, it usually makes me feel worse, haha.) and because I know that, with me asking this question without an account for you to PM a response to, the only way you can answer is for you to add another AMAZING chapter. All in all, I REALLY enjoyed reading this and really hope you pump out another chapter! ~Jerboa :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Might I recommend a pic for your story? I think you should go with a nice mug shot of Eeyore the donkey from Winnie the Pooh you know the one that's always in a gloomy mood and says "thank you for noticing me", at least if you intend to keep that "positive" summary you currently have up. I mean for crying out loud, you start off with "not likely to be continued" and "Reasons why not to read this" lol! Anyways this story is what I like to call a review-less gem (although it's being remedied write now, that was a pun), it's very unique and I love that you're going to showcase a very obscure TNG character like Taurik. I also like that it seems like you've come up with another explanation as to how Treia got to the 24th century other then Q. Don't get me wrong he's my absolute favorite Trek character if not, in all of fiction but it's the most commonly used. I not certain if they would allow 14 year olds into the academy however, much like the military you probably have to be an adult for your species, or perhaps they've making an exception since they know she's actually 22 mentally speaking? Your take on what happened to the "old" internet is intriguing, and probably likely to go the way of The Library of Alexandria, during a nuclear war since much of the infrastructure is likely to be destroyed, since most information now a days is stored in cloud servers, and more and more casual net users have 'light weight' mobile devices with little to no storage. Probably the most brilliant thing you did here was the dialogue between Treia and the chatbot, you got their sugar-coated nonsensical jabber down packed, and to me that makes her more relocatable when I was a kid I would spend hours talking to those things. You should come up with some way to have Data make a cameo, now that's one "cleverbot" she'd really have a fun time chatting with. |